Comprehensive Comics: Give Me Another Chat Group for the Dead Warrior System

Damn it, how can you be qualified to touch the porcelain mythical Daluo? The range of other people's attacks starts at the lowest level of the multiverse. Just spitting can kill you millions of times. Does your **** of ten meters and four make you invincible, or does it make you a god? The most I can do is let you, a bastard, rob a canteen, and be shot to death as soon as you step out. Haha, so funny.

The overall writing is a bit boring, the sentences in some places do not make sense, the battle description lacks tension, and the character communication is sometimes slightly awkward. The setting is okay so far. Although it is not top-notch, it is still reasonable. There are no big problems with the story structure. It can make people motivated to read. I hope the author will work harder and improve his writing skills. Some parts are really dry and boring, such as the battle with the gecko. There is almost no description of the battle, and the gap in strength is huge. It is understandable to directly crush it, but there are many places in that paragraph that are not very smooth to read, and it is also boring to watch.

Has the soul of Sekiryuutei been destroyed? Or. Nianghua, the real Sekiryuutei, is a woman

The paragraph is unclear and difficult to read. It's like taking a shower and having the water cut off from time to time. Please pay attention to sentence fragmentation and typos

Ah? The battle scenes you wrote are so boring. That is to say, if you can't write well, I suggest you pass it by crushing it, otherwise it will be really **. Overall, it looks boring and boring. Apart from the fact that the world view is a bit interesting, the rest is not interesting at all. Even if the writing is more interesting, even if you are funny, it will still be better than this

Oh oh oh finally I feel like a girly Rimuru

The writing is a bit sloppy and the plot has very little to watch.

Does the author speak without curling his tongue? Many sentences have the feeling of being unclear.

Let me guess, is the Luo Li the author is talking about the previous Double Hammer Luo Li (funny face)

I didn't take a closer look, but I saw a place that felt like it had a lot of flaws. There was Academy City, which meant there was a demon god and Aleister. The evil mechanical god exe came to die?

After all, the space dimension and the space dimension are also realms, which shows that the protagonist can freely raise and lower the dimension. In addition, it can also enrich Qin's technology tree.

There are too many typos and I can't understand the punctuation marks. It looks messy.

The sentence fragmentation in the previous chapters is like that of a primary school student. It's so uncomfortable to watch. Can the author change it?

I just read the beginning. I listened to novels, and it felt like a running account. It was very strange. It felt like the preface didn't match the follower.

Speaking of which, this book won't be in the palace again. I'll order it if it's not in the palace.

Now that I have become more beautiful and younger, only my name is left.

Forget about typos, even the name is wrong from time to time

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