Comprehensive Comics: Add Some Liver Emperor in Your Daily Life and Join the Chat Group

Not to my liking, too messy, It is suggested to the author that when writing a comprehensive comic world, it is best not to add chat**. It is easy to make the main and secondary unclear. Just fuse the ordinary and daily worlds with a dozen extraordinary or high-strength worlds with similar worldviews. Don't make the worldview too messy and complicated. Also, the main character's system is not called liver. It keeps rising anytime and anywhere. You can add points to everything. There is no need for it. There is no need for appearance, emotional intelligence, etc. Main system upgrades can be set as percentages. It's just a daily world. There is no need to divide it into ten stars. I suggest the author to read the manga: Start with daily life to gain proficiency. The setting and plot are pretty good, but for me the protagonist starts too late. It only started in the senior year of high school, because most of the well-known variety comics were in high school. The first and second years of high school started almost the same. There are too few well-known ones in college. Anyway, I haven't watched any of them. Then develop the plot according to the strength of the protagonist. If the protagonist increases his strength from an early age and opens up a dimensional gap between the strongest people in the world, I personally recommend focusing on the daily heroine, romance, Shura field, and daily life. All kinds of battles are used to connect and get to know the heroine and warm up the scene. The protagonist becomes invincible in the world. , Slow down the pace, just make the protagonist famous as a martial arts genius. This chaebol big shot will not despise the protagonist, but he will not take it too seriously. After all, he is just one of the martial arts geniuses. The chaebol heroine will not be sniped by her family. After all, martial arts masters are still popular, and the male protagonist is also a martial arts genius. Among them, the male protagonist defeated the world's number one Yujiro Fanma when he was eight or nine years old. Since his failure, Yujiro Fanma has trained himself even harder, just to defeat the male protagonist. In this way, when the male protagonist meets and fights Yujiro again, Yujiro's words are even more shocking and pretentious. Of course, the male protagonist must be crisp and quick in all battles, and resolve the battle with an instant kill. After all, he has developed a dimensional level of strength, and the fight is back and forth, which is so embarrassing. The male protagonist must have a peaceful mind. After all, his strength is already stretched by one dimension, and he still panics. If the male protagonist has not opened up the dimensional level of strength, it is better to become famous earlier, achieve the name of invincibility, and become famous at a faster pace. Don't play low-key and pretend to be a pig to eat the tiger. After all, the strength has not opened up the dimensional level gap. If you do this, you will find something to do for yourself. You are mentally ill.

Especially the description of Hoshino Ai's relationship, if you think about it carefully, it actually makes sense if you think about it. It is normal for children who have been domestically abused to have some problems, and it can also be regarded as a redemption story. Ai was born in a single-parent family, and she had suffered long-term domestic violence from her mother. When her mother was arrested for theft when she was still young, Ai was temporarily placed in an orphanage while she was in prison. However, even after her mother was released from prison, the other party did not come to take Ai home. After living in the orphanage for a long time, Ai never had the experience of loving others or being loved by others. The original is twelve years old, but I feel like that's the case. It's too young. It would be better to be sixteen. All in all, it's well written and covers everything!

Because I haven't read it smoothly, why do I feel so out of touch with what I write? ? ?

Commentary on Chapter 15: Meeting at Yizhuang in "Tomb Robbery: Starting from Begging for Food in Western Hunan" written by Encountering Ghosts and Bu Shu.