Lord: I Started with Rabbits, but Became the Hope of Longguo

Don't write about me directly, write the protagonist's name, otherwise it will feel a little wrong.

The introduction is not very good. At least I read the title of the book and clicked in. However, because the introduction is not very good, I have no interest in it.

The content is pretty good, but don't write "I" directly, it feels weird.

I have never seen anyone more stupid than this author. In the first few chapters, the main character's name is still in the normal third person, and then it becomes the first person, "I, me, my," look at it. This kind of first-person pronoun should not give the author a place to survive. The first-person heresy will be looked down upon.

If you think it looks good, give some flowers and comment, and if you think it doesn't look good, just swap it out and replace it with a book. It is normal for a new author to have some flaws when he starts writing a book. If you feel that the flaws outweigh the flaws, don't always dismiss others without reading a few chapters and thinking it's not good. What if the author doesn't give us what we want to see? If you are not convinced, write a book and let me see how you write it.

It's so uncomfortable to go from third person to first person and back to third person again! The protagonist entered school with the best grades in the beginning, but his IQ turned out to be 1??

92 And 93 are repeated

It feels like I'm watching from a third person's perspective, which is weird

Thank you, readers, for your great appreciation. Your appreciation is the greatest affirmation for the little author. Your comments are support for the little author. The little author will work hard to write well! I wish all readers a happy reading!

Commentary on Chapter 6: Crazy Temptation on the Edge of Suicide, "Lord: The Rabbit Starts, But Becomes the Hope of the Dragon Kingdom" written by a man who doesn't take a shower.