Reborn in the World of Gods: My Troops Can Be Resurrected

This introduction, doesn't the author feel his eyes hurt when he looks at it? It's a long paragraph that makes his face blurry. Just give a brief introduction of yourself. At most, you can add some personal novelties to attract attention. But if you don't write a long paragraph without interruption, it's not an introduction if it's too detailed. You're not writing an essay.

I would like to give you a suggestion. Why don't you break this introduction into sections? It's so hot that it slaps my face in one section. It's a bit deducted for my first sense.

Chapter 1, Lin Xueer, grandpa, one of the only five-star generals in the empire? Read it over and see if you finish coding without checking? They are all unique, one of a kind,

The protagonist is too approachable. You are a god. You behave like an ordinary person. You don't know anything and want to ask questions. You actually ask your believers why. The protagonist, Taila's followers, are okay.

This first chapter of yours is really hard to explain in one sentence. Subway, old man, looking at the phone.

In fact, a headache for many readers is typos. What can I say, there are indeed a lot of typos in this book. But I will correct it, as a newbie. Understand it. If you have any suggestions, you can make them.

I have lost my expectations for this novel, so I won't give it away

It's really uncomfortable that this introduction is not divided into paragraphs.

How should I put it? My wife explained it too carefully and I didn't want to read it. If I say it sounds good, it means the explanation is good. If I say it sounds bad, it means I feel like vomiting.

It's so annoying to be there all the time.