Anime Crossover: A Journey Through the Dimensions

There are too many adjectives, the language should be concise, the paragraphs should not be too long, add more character interaction and less psychological description. Non-important scenery should be mentioned in one stroke. Fan fiction is not that easy to write. Look at what other people write to see how you can write comfortably. There are so many shortcomings that I can't even complain about them. What's the point of writing about sunsets every day? Wouldn't it be better to push the plot a little more with that few words? I really don't know what to write about. I can write about the interaction between the male and female protagonists. If I don't want to write about it, I can write about character conflicts. The protagonist must kill decisively. Write less about men and more about women. Even if you write about the flirting interaction between the protagonist and the heroine, it is better than the sunset or the like. Read more good fan fiction and study hard. I really can't stand it anymore, so I got out.

Yes, this is too poisonous. . . . . .

Even the body of disaster and poison cannot bear it

Also, could the author's layout be better? It's a bit hard to watch! If you see my comment, please reply.

Commentary on Chapter 1: Awakening Memories of "Complex: Journey to Dimensional Connection" written by Asuka Kazufeng.

It looks okay, but could you please add more words to this paragraph? The densely packed words make me dizzy.