The School Belle Got a Demon God's Heart Transplant, and I Became Her Second Personality

The protagonist's second personality, the demon god, is pretty enough. The subject matter is good, but it's a pity that the pacing is not well grasped. It's okay to kill a villain and draw divine power several times, but there are too many exaggerated descriptions, which actually misses the protagonist's character. It is grinding and whining, and the villain is given so much description. It is not in line with the clean and neat methods of a demon god, but it seems a bit second-guessing.

Good guy, when I see everyone talking about water, I won't watch it. It's a waste of money and it's not worth it.

I can tell at a glance that you have experience in water, but considering that you are very tight these days, it is not easy to gain experience, so whatever, I will give you a good fortune. ┣┫████┃Water┃█┃ ┃┃████┃Emperor┃█┃ ┃┃████┃True┃█┃

I can tell at a glance that you have experience in water, but considering that you are very tight these days, it is not easy to gain experience, so whatever, I will give you a good fortune. ┣┫████┃Water┃█┃ ┃┃████┃Emperor┃█┃ ┃┃████┃True┃█┃

The protagonist's position is not clear. An old man knows his identity, the strongest SS on earth. Is the protagonist just a SS? People can know the identity of the Supreme Demon God from another world just by watching the live broadcast. It's too cheap. I hope the author can use some snacks

It's true, it's not that the supporting characters talk too much, it's that there are too many supporting characters at once and each one leaves a hole. Also, the scene description is too detailed. Some small actions are not close-ups and there is no need to write them. If they are written in full, it will not have that grand battle feeling. For example, in the part where the area is reduced to an inch, the reaction of just one supporting character should be much better. So many people have the same attitude and writing them one by one seems very watery. I think so, just read it if the author thinks it makes sense.

How awesome!! Keep fighting until the finale. Only in this way can we show that the protagonist is awesome. He is a great demon. He is so awesome that it takes more than ten chapters to defeat the monsters.

Let me just say it, it must be eunuch on the shelves

You only have so much water, you are too strong, right?

I can tell at a glance that you have experience in water, but considering that you are very tight these days, it is not easy to gain experience, so whatever, I will give you a good fortune. ┣┫████┃Water┃█┃ ┃┃████┃Emperor┃█┃ ┃┃████┃True┃█┃