Dao Mo Wen, the Hero of the Bright Moon in the Qin Dynasty

During the Warring States Period, no one was so simple. It was impossible to be so casual. You could become a minister after just saying a few words, and then you said that you had the ability to become a king. Although you have the strength of the Mohists and the descendants of the Wei State, this is not realistic. Don't write it so exaggeratedly all at once. Just like the part you wrote and deleted before, the part where Confucianism regards you as the master, it's too fake. You can write slowly and slowly show off your abilities. Only with your arm strength can this be possible. Don't always reach the sky in one step.

It's like changing people. The characters before and after are different. The author thinks a little too much about time-travelers and fan fiction. Why don't you just write a cool novel? You have to show yourself in depth and have cool readers. You want both. What do you think? You want to take advantage of all the good things? No one has time to watch you write in-depth, bitter and resentful, the master suddenly belched, and you also wrote about abusing the protagonist. TV dramas can do this because the pace is fast and the information is filtered quickly, but novels are read piece by piece. Novels written like this are rubbish, and reality is ordinary people. Who has time to watch you abuse the protagonist, and you are in a bad mood. Who will look at you? Yukionna doesn't want it, just pretend to be noble. In short, it's fun to write fan fiction. If you don't feel comfortable reading the original work, who looks at you as a fan? The last one is called "Four Images" for short.

Until now, except for a little accident at the beginning, ah, yes, it should be called an accident, the protagonist has never encountered a particularly big setback, similar to being severely abandoned by the person he likes, screaming for 30 years, and Hedong for thirty years and Hexi, so the author understands

Judging from the current situation, my evaluation is that Qin Shi Mingyue's book should be pretty good, but the author of the timeline is not clear and can really be confused. Also, the author of Qin Shi's era can add a little more intrigue. After all, it was an era when a hundred schools of thought contended. Of course, the author should follow his own outline. I just suggest that I hope not to make a mess!

I simply don't like it. His character is so ridiculous. It's funny. It's not modern. He should have been beaten to death in ancient times. He speaks poorly and dares to say anything. He looks very sb when he has no ability.

It's weird to read, and the characters don't fit in well.

This is a story about a cuckold eunuch who gives away his daughter during the Qin Dynasty. The key heroine is the fat aunt Gongsun from the second set. 🦙🦙🦙. My blood pressure skyrocketed and I vomited. 🤮

I feel like what I wrote later is getting more and more embarrassing.

I read your book by Wu Chenzi. I enjoyed the first fifty chapters. I thought I had found a good book. But after the fifty chapters, I started to get addicted. I read five chapters in a row and couldn't hold on. Why is it that the head of the Renzong does everything by himself and is reduced to asking the maid to get up? Let's not talk about it. The snow girl's cool and cold type has been written into a lively type, and she also has sex with the protagonist. Is this changing the heroine? So although the dozens of chapters in your book are quite good, I still disagree. If it continues to be like this in the future, I will change it back

I advise the author to make it longer, but it is too short. How short your current updates are, how short your 🐮🐮 will be! ! !