The Beloved Son Who Was Reborn as a Prince

It's very attractive from the beginning, and the author's writing style is also great. I look forward to more updates, hahaha, I want to see the heroine violently torture the scumbags.

I'm too lazy to change my number, I hope I won't be caught later. After taking a look, I found that the style has improved a lot compared to the previous one. The overall structure is okay, but there are a few problems. One is to divide it into paragraphs. If it is too long, readers will definitely not be able to read it. This is a lesson learned through blood and tears. It is best to control 1-5 lines. It can be one sentence per sentence. Internet articles are not afraid of this. One is that the character design is slightly contradictory. For example, as Jin Xue is a princess, Su Yaner's behavior is completely wrong and she can be squatted. It is a bit far-fetched to forgive her at first. I think the logic you wrote is that her father saved the heroine's father, Su Lili's family was grateful for this, and was very kind to Su Yan'er. The heroine also cared about her, and Jin Xue cared about Su Lili, so he forgave her. This point is suggested to be written above, that is to say, Jin Xue's psychological activity became similar to: If she hadn't cared about Su Lili and Su Yan'er's father, Yu Marquis, for saving her life, she would have punished her. This way you won't let some people who are more careful ask logical questions and then criticize you. Similarly, Su Jiatong's appearance on the note later was too abrupt, and could have been mentioned earlier. Talking about the recent visit of my uncle's family, you can see how smoothly you wrote the appearance of Qin Hua (I didn't remember). After all, these days, no matter how detailed your logic is, people will criticize you. A little less is better. Of course, the characters of the two female supporting characters are currently a little thin, but they will be gradually enriched with the plot! Another one is that the sense of immersion is slightly weaker. The pictures in my mind are relatively coherent here, but the character emotions, especially the resentment in the first chapter, are weak. I took a closer look and found that you focused more on actions and appearance than on psychology. That is to say, the emotional investment is not enough, and the reflected emotions are weak. This is not a big problem, but I hope you will keep improving~ This is easier to solve. For example, describe the feeling where the heroine's hand was stepped on. The pain, what kind of pain she felt, her thoughts and state at the time, writing this helps the readers to take on the role. Finally, it's the writing style. It's not that there's something wrong with the writing style, but I can feel that you wrote the first chapter very carefully and carefully and should have revised it. The later chapters may have been too tiring. By the fourth chapter, the gap between the writing style and the first chapter is quite big. Not as fine as before. This can be simply modified after writing to make it as unified as possible. It is normal for slight changes as the writing becomes longer, but try to minimize this gap. Otherwise, some readers will be amazed by the first chapter and not be able to find the feeling afterward. In terms of plot, Gu Yan itself is slow. I think the pace is okay. It's a little draggy in some places, but overall it's pretty good. The rest will be sent to the building

I read it in one sitting, the writing is much better than before, the story has ups and downs, it's beautiful! Nice! Nice! Say important things three times! ! !

The new book is hot... Dad, I'm optimistic about you!

I finally won the first place. It's beautiful and the story is exciting. Come on, I'm waiting to gain weight😹😹😹

I've grabbed the sofa. Come on, your new book collection and subscriptions are rising all the way! ! !

I still like to read new articles the most. This is a conscientious work. I will not lose money if I invest in it. Cheer for Dada. I wish Dada will succeed and become an instant success!

Believe in yourself, you are the best 😹😹😹 Bai Bai

The article written by the young lady is very interesting, but I feel it is a little lacking. The emotional scenes are not very rich.