A Group of Players Are Arriving at the End of the World

I read novels just for fun. What bothers me the most is that the author downplays the sense of smell in the beginning. So, I couldn't stand it as soon as I read the beginning.

Author, please write down the details of the maid picking up the eggs clearly. Also, there is no detail about the maid who sheds blood to identify the master, and the maid picking up the eggs - reporting to the protagonist - the beast horde - a tragic victory - the maid did nothing during the whole process - and ran away with the eggs? This is really painful.

Let's not talk about why the protagonist is not a time traveler. It's just this emotional line. I suggest that the author needs to suppress the shouting to a great extent. Besides, some of the emotional plots between the protagonist and the women you wrote feel a bit cliche. If this kind of emotional plot is not mastered well, it will be useless. So this kind of emotional problem can be as perfunctory as you need, or you can just not write it at all, and then wait until the finale to add a few perfunctory sentences. For example, the protagonist and the heroine get married and live a beautiful and happy life. Alas, these two sentences are perfect, not only showing that the ending is beautiful but also perfunctory. But this novel of yours probably requires a harem (you can tell from the protagonist's words)). If this so-called harem takes too many, it will no longer be a harem, but a stallion's paradise. And in the harem, there are too many emotional lines to write about, so it needs to be as perfunctory as possible. Author, a novel like yours should describe more about the protagonist, the players, and some game systems and game mechanics. I hope not to describe too much about the emotional problems between the protagonist and women. There is also the character named Wei Ya. The role you arranged for her is so obvious. This kind of plot where the protagonist meets the main palace by chance, and you, the author, arranged for her to have dinner with the protagonist. Audiences who have read novels and TV series can see it at a glance. Although I don't know what other people think, whether they have the same thoughts as me, I just want to say that I don't like this character very much in this plot arrangement. Moreover, she also cheated, and she was in a regular competition, but any audience who likes game novels will feel disgusted. This character can only be said to be not good, and it is recommended to greatly reduce her role.

I saw the head maid, and you just wrote his luck report. The key point is that she casually picked up Bai Ze's egg and caused a wave of beasts to come out. After that, she was all alone and had nothing to do, so the protagonist and supporting actors had to wipe her butt for her. I can't stand seeing this.

That Qiao Luo is so disgusting, so poisonous

The book is good, but it's a pity that the character Qiao Luoluo doesn't appear at all in the later part. I really like this character.

It's not interesting, especially for the protagonist, who is completely useless. The system calls out dear master, and all decisions are suggested by the system. Where is the protagonist? It doesn't make sense whether it exists or not, and it's still trash, and the spirit is still high. I don't see any nonsense? It gives me the feeling that you are nothing but trash

To be honest, I did make me laugh several times within the first hundred chapters. It started well and the world view was grand, but the rest was weak, the plot was too little, and the players did not have enough roles, which shows that the author's skills in writing online game novels are still not enough. I remember a book with the same theme in which the protagonist made a system to travel to the underworld. Although that book was not very good, but The subject matter is novel, the writing is okay, and I can barely read it. How can I put it, the main role of this kind of book is to write more about players, and less NPC plots, because I can't help but put myself into the players. If the players are happy, I am happy. The life and death of the NPCs in the plot is none of my business, so be it. I hope to keep up the good work, and I will quit.

I don't know why this rating is so high

Write the protagonist better