Reincarnation Paradise: Scarlet Reincarnation

In my opinion, this book can be said to be among the top five Paradise fans (although there are very few Paradise fans), but there are still some small problems, which are based on some of the high-quality features of the high-quality novels I have read. First of all, Pipi Xiao's character and way of speaking are not completely written according to Mosquito. For example, Su Xiao's sinister smile in Chapter 13. Mosquito has never used this word to describe Su Xiao in thousands of chapters. It does not mean that it must be written like a paradise, but it is a bit dramatic, as if Su Xiao has become a mentally retarded villain in a mentally retarded novel. You can add a description at the end, saying that Su Xiao is to test the protagonist. If the protagonist is weak, he will be killed. You can lay some foreshadowings in the early stage, and the early stage of the paradise is to support more talents, so you can write more passives that can be used in the later stage. You can write faster when writing about derivative worlds in the early stage. There are too many common anime fans, and the routines are all poorly written. It is best not to write online fans and unpopular anime fans. They are too discouraging. The author of Sword Art Online has done a good job in this article. Before taking Mr. Tong as the protagonist, and before going to the spear field, the protagonist can be with Tong. The old man has a fight, and the old man uses his two swords to injure the protagonist a little, and the protagonist cuts off Grandpa Tong's sword (using some psychological descriptions and environmental descriptions), and can also make Grandpa Tong be the judge like the original King Da Mao. In the later stage, the change of Grandpa Tong's mentality as a judge can be highlighted, and it will be okay to fight for the world in the future. Cooperation, the scar left by Grandpa Tong on the protagonist was not recovered when the protagonist recovered from the injury. Later, it can be written as the protagonist, so it can be completely integrated into the reincarnation paradise. When the strength becomes stronger and famous, the characteristics of the protagonist can be written, and the title can be written like "The Thousand Wrath of Scars", which can be replaced later in the native world. Who has a high status can be used as a symbol. For example, when Su Xiao enters the Canglong and hits the land, the Black King's arm is regarded as a symbol of the war demon (this is what I think about how to write it if I write it myself. After all, I think the chapter of Sword Art Online is well written, but I may not be able to write it later. I must write more) Since the White Emperor is a snake that devours the world, it can be written that it evolved from the source of the world. Try not to write that it evolved by eating the flesh and blood of higher creatures like Bubu (of course it can also be written like this, and then trade flesh and blood with Su Xiao to enhance the relationship) Finally, don't use some writing techniques that are often used in other novels. For example, the protagonist kills a main tank with a knife, and then you describe the other people taking a breath of cold air, and then say exclamations or something, and marvel for ten or so lines. This is very disgusting. Try to be like a mosquito, finish one sentence, and then move on to the next paragraph. Another thing is to write it more clearly. For example, chapters 19 to 25 are a bit messy, and all the descriptions are very messy. You can do more descriptions when the characters leave the factory, including language, action, and psychology. You can also write down the character's experience. The sense of immersion is still very important. These are some of my small opinions, the author can refer to them

I can't say it's good, I can't say it's bad, I can only say that it has so many flaws that I don't know how to complain about it. I haven't read more than twenty chapters, and it's only the second world, but... I looked through the table of contents, and how should I put it, of course you can use other people's settings, but you don't violate other people's basic settings and then forcefully bring your own characters into it... Brother, go read the book. Mosquito is not finished yet, I saw that there is one with Bai Ye in the back catalog... To be honest, wouldn't it be better if you picked it out independently? There can be limited cooperation in the paradise, and I can count the number of people who cooperate with him in the world. The Holy Grail War also appeared in the catalog... I didn't click in to see it. This is my problem, but I guessed from the catalog that they are in the same world... Two hunters are thrown into a world in the early stage. Brother, please be serious... Unless there is a special world or a special mission, two hunters will not enter the same world... Let me also tell you my thoughts after reading Chapter 17. In the first world, Naruto, Orochimaru's experimental subject, the main line escapes from the laboratory, the side line kills the experimental subject, and two mandatory executions, it is obvious , there is no forced execution in the side missions in the original setting. Secondly, in the description of the battle, the protagonist stabbed Orochimaru and ran out... Well, pretty boy, a person with a physical fitness of about ten points stabbed Orochimaru and ran out... Then in the real world, the protagonist found Byakuya and bragged with him. I don't know what the point of writing this paragraph is. Is it to build friendship or to hold a cup? As a result, I saw two people fighting, and it was obvious that they were going to forcefully fill the cup. In the second world, the protagonist goes out in five minutes, and the original setting is that the stronger the person, the later he goes out. The first world was B+, but you wrote him as a person who is stronger than everyone else. The first level is from one to nine. According to the original setting, ordinary people can upgrade from one to two in the world. The first level of the ninth level is experienced by others. After four or five worlds, according to the minimum reward of one to two points, others are better than you who have only experienced one world. Professional inheritance, no matter how awesome the profession is, it takes time. The beginning of extermination also starts with basic sword skills. In other words, other people's cannon fodder inheritance in the early stage starts the same as you, so in the second world, is it interesting to start to forcefully increase the protagonist's combat power? The most important thing is that there are only two kinds of people in Samsara Paradise, one is the bastards who mix in the regular world, and the other is the lunatics who mix in the original world. In the early stage of the regular world, everyone is the same. After the third level, the gap will widen when you start to take your own career path. In addition, the passers-by written about are too dramatic... It is better not to write and have your own. The passers-by in the adventure group have a greater intelligence advantage than you, so forcing a cup is the most deadly. In addition, Bai Ye was given special props before being given the qualification to inherit the law of destruction. Ordinary contractors bought it by themselves. The Scarlet Lord didn't give the money and wanted to prostitute an inheritor with the status of a hunter for nothing. Do you think the paradise will give it to him? Why would anyone fancy you as a B+ grader? You were given a qualification only after you had to go through the rules of the paradise with special items. Now that you have escaped and got nothing, you have become a prostitute for nothing. This cheat is just for the sake of cheating...

Can anyone tell me about this book and how it was written? Poisonous?

If you write Gou Ba, you can be a little worse than the original work, but you can't be worse than the original one.

The Orochimaru described by the author is very different from the one in Naruto. He is not the same person at all.

Is it my imagination? Why do I feel like ordering food?

I remember that the sword seemed to evolve to kill creatures at first.

Most of the comments in the comment area are stupid comments. It is recommended to form a group and don't read the book reviews. They are just comments just to criticize and disgust people. Quantum Reading is just for reading. I hope to continue to update. There are really few Paradise fans who write well, and most of them are not long enough.

Why did the protagonist choose to be bound with a short sword? Isn't it better to use a long knife or a Miao knife? If you meet Pipixiao like this, you will probably suffer a lot.

No, a good book, no more eunuchs