Peaceful and Peaceful

From the roadside stall review circle. Overall Rating: Good The writing style and setting are both good. Overall, it's a pretty good book. There's not much to say about it, so I'll mainly talk about some minor issues with language and details here. It can be seen that the author has good writing skills, but in some places it looks like a composition, and some of the language is a little too complicated. For example: In this era of advanced new media, there are probably not many people like him who would not buy a smartphone if it were not for the convenience of contacting his sister. They rely solely on television and newspapers to obtain information. I'm a little tired from reading. Personally, I think it would be better if it was more concise or broken into short sentences. Let's talk about the details. The setting for Chao Qianlin is too difficult to handle. Personally, I think a woman with perfect appearance should not appear in a novel with a serious style of writing. Even if she does appear, she should not be a main character or appear prematurely. According to the author's intention, this should be a foreshadowing, but it can easily become a poisonous point. If it is not handled well, it can easily collapse the story. Calling it a Mary Sue is an understatement. And it also caused another wave of things that can be said to be poisonous: Chao Qianshen's love for his sister is close to love (obviously it is love), the killer Li Liqing fell in love with Chao Qianlin at first sight but did not kill her and brought her back to his boss (I think this is Li Liqing's character setting). The words are too emotional and morbid, and it feels like a slight dissuasion. Hope it can be dealt with next. Then I continued, probably to explain the background and setting, so I wrote the plot that Chao Qianshen didn't even know Taoist Ren's real name. However, the phone call between Chao Qianshen and Taoist Ren in the first chapter and the subsequent interactions between the two people gave people the feeling that they had interacted with each other many times, and it felt a bit unreasonable that they didn't even ask their names; in addition, Chao Qianshen knew about his job. The office may be related to the other world. When Taoist Ren gave him the invitation letter, he specifically asked him to pay attention to whether anything happened. Then Chao Qianshen asked his cherished sister to leave all the protection to attend the party alone. He was frightened at home all night. I hope to give some more obvious foreshadowing hints in the front, otherwise it will look like Jiangzhi. In addition, the move names like Chidori and Rasengan are too ridiculous, so you might consider changing them. When switching scenes, it is recommended to use symbols to separate a row. If you switch directly, the previous paragraph will be Chao Qianlin, and the next paragraph will become Chao Qianshen, and it will be difficult to react. Apart from these, I think there are no big problems with the writing of the book itself, but it may be more difficult to develop at a starting point where Shuangwen is the mainstream. That's pretty much it.

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"Chong Chong Peace" 🎉 Dou Niang 🎉From the ruined temple to the city, he was involved in the disputes between good, evil, demons and demons. 🎉This book does not include good people in the traditional sense. I hope you will stick to the three views and view them correctly. 🎉It's very interesting, welcome to read. 🎉The heroine's perspective ✨

First of all, Dou Niang's works are meant to teach children bad things. As Dou Niang said, there is no absolute good or evil in the article, and there is a certain subversion of concepts.