Ballistic Wake

Japan is Japan, Japanese is Japanese, write about a country that holds its tongue, the United States can be written about New America, Myrickan, or any ugly country, it all looks awkward to you.

First of all, the author still has not grasped the essence of writing online novels. He wants to write everything, and he wants to write everything completely. As a result, the content of the novel is not refined, procrastinates, and the main line progresses slowly. Readers are driven away by you. As an author, when you write a novel, you first have an outline. You should have an idea of ​​what you want to write. Do you want to write this novel about the attack on Pearl Harbor? I think it's definitely not the case. You wanted to write about how the protagonist used his abilities to annihilate the enemy during the Pearl Harbor incident. But look at what you wrote. You wrote so many words to describe Japan's bombing of Pearl Harbor. I want to see the bombing of Pearl Harbor. It would be great if I went to see a movie. There are also documentaries. Why should I read your novel? This is a typical lack of prioritization. There are many such authors. They often think that their writing is very good, their writing is very detailed, and they think that their writing is very scene-like. In fact, no matter how good your writing is, what's the use? It's not what readers need. You write in vain, spend all your energy in vain, and get tired in vain.

It's a wonderfully written piece but also has a lot of bugs. I hope the author can improve it and make it even more wonderful.

Hurry up and update quickly, write and stop updating until the bombing of the Japanese den🙅