Humans Are in the Heavens, Side by Side with the Protagonists in the Heavens

The plot is okay, don't hesitate to write about your feelings. You write like a primary school student learning mathematics. Let me ask a few questions. For the first time, don't write out things that you won't need in the lottery. Only write the few that you can use. Not only will the number of words be low, but there will also be many things that you didn't design in the plot, but the readers feel that they can be used. Don't make up various excuses to say that they are not used, and just omit them. This is the first question. I have read a lot of things, and I feel that they are of some use, but I just skipped them after extracting them. The second question is, you go to one world to practice a system of one world, but in fact the best thing is to major in a system with the highest ceiling, and use other worlds as the material for cultivation. The third question is, don't include a lot of so-called insights in the article, explanations of what problems, and insights like "Ze Dao Meet Me". You were in Devouring the Starry Sky World. At the beginning, you wrote a lot of the male protagonist's so-called insights, including the male protagonist thinking about whether to expose himself at the beginning, and later there was a gym owner who trained the male protagonist. He also wrote less about the training process. During the training process, the male protagonist wrote a long paragraph called "Zhan Dao Meet Me". In terms of spiritual perception, these are written like a junior high school student moaning for no reason, and later returning to the world of immortality, writing about greed, and here it is even more like a young man moaning for no reason. All in all, I feel like the author is a novice. There are a lot of unnecessary complaints and a lot of minor abuses. I think the level of the author is average in Infinite Flow.

First of all, let me talk about it. The protagonist feels like a waste. First of all, he licks it here and there, and then in terms of personality, he feels like a loser. I read the damn novel, and then he is like a nanny, meddling in his own business. I am here to read the kind of exciting writing, not this kind of boring writing, you know? ***, The time traveler just says whatever he wants without thinking about how he knows these issues?

The main character is a loser. After so much? The first few dozen pictures. It has been settling in for so long, and I have been comprehending it for so long. The result? When he sees a beautiful woman, he is like a male dog in heat. He would rather give up all his possessions. He is also a double-standard dog himself. At the beginning, there are all kinds of spoilers for the protagonist of the immortal world. Then when it came to Swallowing Starry Sky, it was different. To Luo Feng, he said that he would not be stupid enough to tell other people's secrets. Isn't this a fight between the left and right brains? Summarize it in one sentence. It's just that this novel is as stitched as it gets. Every few chapters, the protagonist's character is turned upside down, and every few chapters, the protagonist's personality is turned upside down again.

After reading the two worlds (the world of immortality and the swallowing of stars), there are only two words in the whole article: "Contradiction". . . The protagonist's actions and thoughts are often inconsistent. While Devouring the Starry Sky, he was talking about life and death, fighting, training, and the next second, he was giving Luo Feng a nanny-style sparring partner! The plot of returning to the immortal world is even more ridiculous. The royal goddess plotted against the protagonist and Xiao Chen four times, and with Lan Nuo's intervention, the protagonist claimed to have killed him, but in fact, he spared them again and again on the grounds of martial arts. Other men (famous supporting characters in the original novel) were also spared, but the passerby man was actually killed. Laughing to death. There is also the sword intention of [Ze Dao Meet Me], which is very powerful when you have nothing to do. The psychological description is even more disgusting. . . Summary: Mother-in-law, procrastination, inconsistent, split personality.

When the protagonist goes to a battlefield outside the territory, he simply leaks the domain treasure? The overlord of the universe still has many unexplored domain treasures. If someone exposes the domain treasures in an extraterrestrial battlefield, won't they go directly to the extraterritorial battlefield to grab it? Don't mention that the four major ethnic groups forbid the Venerable's fate, but they are nothing in front of the treasures of the domain. The Venerables of the human race will do evil things.

Why don't you write so many inner monologues, Luo Li? The protagonist is like an idiot. How can you, a time-traveler, realize what your life is like? Isn't it to improve strength, survival is the first factor? After one chapter, half of it is an inner monologue and a lot of nonsense.

The first time I returned to the Immortal Realm, I became more and more angry. Why do you care so much about it? Xiao Chen's personal affairs were said to be solved by himself, but later he was careful about it without telling Xiao Chen clearly. Also, his fiancée was still there; and that Zhao Lin'er, she should have died long ago, which led to a lot of trouble later.

It was okay in the early stage, but it was a little bit historical in the later stage. It over-boasted the realm of eternal life, set the Supreme Being too weak, and created millions of other shores? That's outrageous. . . Setting the immortal saint to be even more outrageous than sacrificing the Tao. . . He even directly ignored the existence of the Divine Elephant Prison-Suppressing Power, which can reach the realm of infinity and completely transcends eternal life if he successfully cultivates it. He over-proclaimed eternal life and seriously doubted that the author only looked at eternal life. Others are like the first life, the Holy King, the Yang God, and the Dragon Talisman. I only read the introduction of the novel and did not read the original work.

Apart from anything else, the protagonist of this novel has so many inner dramas! The next chapter is an inner drama. To be honest, it's boring. I think about life every day. There is no one else. A world like the one that covers the sky and lives forever is more interesting.

I want to take a look at the world of immortality