What Should I Do If I Become an Elf?

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How should I put it? Let me share some personal opinions and reading experience. If you have any ideas, please feel free to discuss them below. _(:З∠)_ First of all, please ask the author to write the main story carefully. For newcomers, please don't add reborns and the like randomly. We are here to see Pokémon, not the mess. The second is the problem of chapter water. Others say that you have too little dry content. If you make up this book into a movie with a memory stick in your mouth, then the problem with you, the author, will be obvious┐(´-｀)┌. Some descriptions of appearance, characters, etc. Are too much, which seriously slows down the advancement of the timeline. One and a half battle chapters Some are too much description, others are more about battle details. The author, you are mostly describing what the protagonist is like and what the enemy is like. The battle is boring and simple, without any fluctuations. The enemies are just like idiots. 😒, Zoom in on the moves, and then the enemy will feel so scared that they can't take care of themselves. Then In the end, there were too many descriptions of the protagonist and ultimate moves, and then it disappeared. I never saw an enemy who could fight to the death, had quick thinking and could be called a warrior, and had no fighting spirit. I also didn't see the protagonist facing the battle seriously, and there was no warrior who could make the protagonist analyze and think carefully and make use of the environment, battles and journeys. The journey is as dry and boring as a running account. There is no 1v1 of passionate real men with the desire to fight, and there is no twists and turns of jojo's wits but it is reasonable. I hope the author can think about the life and death game between two warriors, or the details of the duel between mages that determine success or failure, rather than simply fighting. Of course, I can also see that the author is also working hard to improve the water problem, but simply reducing it without adding any practical information is simply a running account, and the key problem has not been improved (just like my review, if I add a little emoticons and emoticons, it will obviously be more readable, and the author, you are just deleting it. →_→), Regarding this situation, you can refer to the book Warlock in the Marvel World. In it, the protagonist and the SHIELD agent can talk from Chapter 4 to Chapter 12 without anyone saying that he can still see the water with gusto. The conversation is rich and interesting, and it can be made into a movie with imagination. It is also the best-written book I have read so far. The author is also said to be a student. Third, I personally think that stores, system upgrades and various gifts from mythical beasts are a serious failure. This not only affects the development of the plot, but is also brainless. It is just like a full set of level 999 divine equipment at the beginning. The combat power develops too fast. What do you plan to write next, author? Continue to fight symbolically, and then use a big move to scare the opponent into motionlessness and then crush him🤔? Such a good subject is simply wasted. I hope that the stores and gifts from various mythical beasts can be reduced in the future. Compared with these, we want to see the protagonist defeat the strong with his own efforts. Even if the talent is weak, so what, our protagonist must be the one and only strong person who breaks through the limit, learns lessons from countless failures, climbs up countless times, and finally reaches the top with ordinary qualifications. Fourth, regarding the plot, don't bring in things with high combat power such as mythical beasts in the early stage. The two chapters of Electric Dragon and Weird Power basically start with the protagonist spending money without thinking, and then push forward all the way. Then a very strong enemy symbolically digs two pits for the protagonist, and then encounters a gift from the mythical beast, and then gives the mythical beast a grand burial. It is simply brainless. The protagonist's journey to becoming stronger is not smooth sailing and never fails. It would be better if you, the author, add some ups and downs and failures appropriately. Even if he is defeated due to a detail error in the ordinary elf battle like the protagonist and dies with unwillingness to grit his teeth, we can still see the protagonist's hard work and struggle. It is exciting enough and can be written for a longer time. There is no need for a grand burial of mythical beasts and a bitter and unwilling failure on the ordinary road. At the same time, there is no need to add plots and backgrounds that are purely for the purpose of sensationalism like in the Weird Chapter. The additions must be done with skill and rationality. The author's additions are too blunt, so it would be better not to add them at all. It is better to write that the protagonist is born in the wild as an ordinary elf with mediocre talents, travels around, fights for food and territory like a wild elf, examines his own situation, and makes a plan to become stronger that suits him. At the same time, he can experience every bit of the relationship between people and elf in the Pokémon world, and the ordinary but warm daily life. Get to know ordinary people and trainers with distinct personalities and different stories, get to know each other, and slowly understand the stories and sorrows behind them, their persistence or the pain of self-abandonment, and build a living Pokémon world. The author has serious flaws in this aspect. He is too fluent and cannot make us remember. NPC. At the same time, the article on Weird Power was a mess at the end. It was okay in the early stage, but ended hastily and completely collapsed in the end. I don't want to read it. Author, do you have an obsession with mythical beasts or something? Do you have to add mythical beasts in the early stage and give the protagonist an upgrade gift package? It's better to change the protagonist to be born in the wild, bring out the key information or items to save the world in the sea of ​​blood, and successfully pass the things on before death, no Leaving behind with regret, the protagonist in the third life saw the restored world after being born and knew that his efforts were not in vain. Then the protagonist traveled around the world. After experiencing the world full of hatred and pain in the previous life, he felt the beauty of the Pokémon world, the sincere friendship and bond between trainers and elves, and the warm and ordinary stories between different Pokémon and ordinary people. Then the protagonist's mentality began to move towards detachment, and he became more and more determined to maintain the world and the relationship between Pokémon and humans at all costs. This is a perfect book. Author, if you add mythical beasts in the early stage, it will be difficult to write. If the combat power is too high, you will not be able to write a wonderful and tortuous plot. After all, if the combat power is too high, everything will be too simple. Of course, it is the author's freedom how to write. Some of my requirements may be a bit too high for a new author who has just written a book. I have read hundreds of books. Although it may not be a big deal, the author's writing style is the same as most of the authors I have read. It is generally lackluster. There is too little practical content and too much unnecessary description, and the plot is a little weak (after all, I guess the author himself does not feel satisfied with the writing of the strange power chapter). But the writing skills are all learned through practice. At least I said everything that I felt was not good in the book, instead of just talking about the water and then making the author feel numb. The first two articles were badly written, so I will write the third article carefully and make it longer. Take your time. Author, your combat power has improved too fast in the previous articles. In this article, you can build a world view and a story between people and Pokémon, or conflicts and misunderstandings, or ordinary warmth, and the protagonist's position in it. Come on, write well, author. I hope to see a perfect article in 3 months_(•̀ω•́ ∠)_. Look at my big Ibrahimovic dancing picture.

Come on, author, I hope you can stick to it, you are poor, so I will always give you recommendation votes, don't be a eunuch, otherwise. By the way, netizens, can I give you a like? ( •̥́ ˍ •̀ू )嘤嘤嘤~

Both worlds are relatively ordinary, and I think it's time for a more relaxed world. The two darker worlds made me feel a little visual fatigue, especially since the wrist-strength chapter was already in the late stages of writing, I felt it was not very relaxing. And it's time to write something special. I still like Chi Ye better. Finally, it's a matter of rhythm! The pace seems slightly slower. I hope the author can create a portal in the introduction. It's been so long since there were two worlds, and I've only seen one and a half, and I've already given up on the other half. I just want to see those more passionate worlds, and the content of Pokémon special comics is more in line with my taste. Okay, I'm done

Sure enough, I'm not the only one who doesn't like Wei Li. I hope the author will finish writing the chapter about Wei Li as soon as possible. Anyway, I'm not going to read it, so I'll just keep it.

The worlds of Meili Sheep and Zhili are a bit different, which may cause strong discomfort to some readers.

Warm man ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

Water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water, water

It's very exciting, but when I choose to fight, I feel a little bad, and it turns out to be wrist strength. This, this, is one of the elves I dislike the most... I hope it won't last long, no, forget it, skip it, it shouldn't have any impact, just look at the settlement

A rare elf perspective, the writing is also very good, a masterpiece worth reading (In the previous game of Electric Dragon, the main character was a Ninja frog who longed for a trainer who had a deep bond with him. |•'-'•)و✧