Zhenguan Begins with Saving Dad

Why do I feel like this gunpowder is going to be stolen? Moreover, this gunpowder was developed by the protagonist. If he just randomly adjusts his position as the protagonist, is Li Er not afraid that his subordinates will become disloyal? Moreover, this person is a member of a noble family, so he is not afraid that gunpowder will be sold everywhere?

Big command? Great cloak? The cloak is actually called a big cloak, but I really didn't find the word big. There is also the usage of being surprised. Can being surprised and amazed give birth to a child? Either I wasn't careful, or I uploaded the bare draft without correcting it. What's even more frightening is that you know it but don't know why, and then you can't express what you mean, and you don't bother to look it up online. One point is given to the subject matter, the system is bound to the ancients, and there is innovation. Worthy of encouragement. One point is given to the plot, combined with history and extended imagination, starting with saving the father. Smooth out the sense of difference, bonus points. Half a cent examines the origins of horseshoes. Half a point is deducted for not being careful about Chinese history. There are physical saddles in the late Han Dynasty, and paintings of horseshoes in the Sui Dynasty. There are objects similar to horseshoes, but they are not made of iron. It was only during the Yuan Dynasty that better horseshoe technology was introduced. If you don't pay attention to this aspect, half a point will be deducted. One point will be deducted for the writing. I was put off by the use of "being surprised". One point is deducted for the plot and characterization (yes, points are added and deducted for the plot, so let's add one point and deduct half a point). The general direction of the plot is fine, but there are problems with the details. Throwing out the difficulty of not being able to use the post horse due to the distance, what is the solution? After finding a few second-generation ancestors, we set off, then went to play horseshoes, and then went to the Turkic camp? Horseshoes are not a solution. The horse's physical strength is the ultimate limit. Reducing hoof wear cannot increase unlimited physical strength! Then let's talk about the operation of getting 15 horses from the house. Not to mention how to use horses so easily. Let's talk about the operation of raising horses in the house. It's over, the Foreign Minister maintains fifteen tanks at home! No exaggeration. This was the status of horses in the early Tang Dynasty. Obviously in order to solve the problem, they ignored the study of history and used a highly inconsistent method to save the situation. Then let's talk about character creation. There is no description of psychological conflict, or it is limited by the writing style, the description is not in place, and the operation of the will of the world is obvious. This is a problem that many novice writers tend to have. If you want to highlight the psychological conflict, but the writing is not good, it is better to use another way to hone your writing skills before taking on the challenge. I thought someone would criticize me, so I wrote it first. 1. If historical articles don't pay attention to history, then just write fictional articles! When questions and doubts arise, do readers point them out? No! 2. Regardless of whether it is a new or old author, if there are problems in the work, readers will point it out because they are really attracted by the article. Otherwise, why would I waste my time writing hundreds of words? It's enough for the navy to just scold and get low scores. As for analyzing so much, do you want to write it in such detail? 3. Old bookworms rarely express opinions when reading books. This time I couldn't hold back because this book made my heart move. Just like the previous Jianghu Tavern, some of the articles touched my heart. This kind of problem is too annoying. It's like a dish. It's full of color, fragrance and flavor, and I want to eat it, but the delicious taste is mixed with the salty taste of sweat and tears. Some people think this is proof of the chef's hard work, but for those who purely enjoy delicious food, it's because the chef didn't do a good job! It could have been better! My metaphor is powerless! That's it!

When I saw the introduction of the book, I thought of an online drama. The content is like this. Because of you, Zhao Yun went in and out seven times and almost died. You are a lost star. For you, Zhuge Liang suffered from ice and fire every day. You lost star... I forgot a few sentences in the middle.

Tang Heshang is now the mountain chief, a teacher, and Changle is a student. The marriage contract between the two is due to ethical differences, so they can refuse it, right?

It's not about modern people traveling to ancient times. I don't want to read it.

If you sign in for a long time, you will accomplish great feats and regain Dongguan. It is just around the corner. Take people's money and kill them and bury them. If I am afraid of you, I will have a good time.

Generally speaking, I don't like it very much. I don't take the emperor seriously. I feel a little self-respecting. Your plan should be to change people's thinking.

The content of this book is very good, I like to read it.

Whether it's true or not, I don't like the petty emperor.

This book is not a time traveler? Native system? I don't feel that the sense of immersion is very good. Everyone has their own preference.