Immortals, Mortals and Gods

I have already written a small part of this book. If I am not satisfied, I have to revise it again. But it seems that no one is reading it. The framework structure seems quite rigorous. Alas, it is really difficult to stand out if it is not a cool article! I hope someone who likes it can leave a comment!

Why does everyone watch it? It's really pretty.

The main character is actually a virgin bitch. In Chapter 92, he was still sacrificing himself for others. It's a fart fairy.

In fact, I rarely comment on novels, but I really couldn't help but comment on this one. Just like the title, the early writing was really good and whetted my appetite, but the writing started to slip in the middle and I couldn't read it. I guess I didn't write a good outline. Let's talk about the advantages first. It is indeed possible in the early stage. It is indeed possible in the early stage. It is indeed possible in the early stage (say important things three times). This is the only advantage. Are you talking about shortcomings? 1. I feel that the description of combat power is very confusing. In the wild continent, the protagonist is just a golden saint (equal to foundation building), who can easily strike with the strength of the King of War and the King of War. You also said here that the saints are comparable to the golden elixir, so can I think that the war king is comparable to the golden infant, and the war emperor is comparable to the above? The pure physical body of the protagonist can almost exert the fighting power of the Nascent Soul (excerpt from Chapter 119 and Chapter 125, the protagonist was just a foundation builder at that time), so when the protagonist unblocks the mana, shouldn't it become more powerful? Why do I feel that after unblocking the mana, I become weaker. I am constantly being chased and beaten by the golden elixir. It is too poisonous, so I feel that the standing system is very confusing. 2. It feels like many times the protagonist is advancing for the sake of advancing the plot, without any specific logic. For example, if the sect is hit hard, in normal people's thinking, shouldn't this be the time for the sect to invest a lot of resources in cultivating talents? The protagonist didn't care about the sect and ran away directly. And when he followed the supporting character to complete the task, I was thinking that the first protagonist was a genius, and the second one was he showing his loyalty to the sect? The sect's management didn't care about him, and he didn't care about him either. He just ran out, which was illogical. 3. This point is actually a continuation of 2. The author has arranged many opportunities for the protagonist. The lotus lantern can increase the speed of cultivation, and there is also a world formation called Jie Tian Dao. The lunar nerve, Zhangba Jinshen, and the solar nerve were found in the cave. Although he can't see it, these are not worth studying. Isn't it a normal person who would choose to settle down, take the opportunities of the sect, and then study these opportunities to enhance his own strength. This is a normal person's thinking, but as for the protagonist, he doesn't care and just goes out to make a living. To be fair, if I were the protagonist, I would definitely choose to settle down, such as practicing the day before yesterday. It's time to upgrade yourself. Can you use the lotus lantern to practice and become a golden elixir? Then you recommend a plot to him, and you go out and find out which materials you need during the golden elixir stage. Rather than saying that the protagonist clearly knows that the lotus lantern can increase the speed of his cultivation, he doesn't care whether he practices or not. He wants to go out and wander around. I don't know the reason why. Anyway, it is said that the protagonist has to go out when he says he wants to go out. If he doesn't practice, he just wants to wander outside. I don't know, and the author doesn't know either. Anyway, just wander around and give him two opportunities, which is great. You can definitely write it like this in the mid-term. The protagonist has accumulated in the sect, upgraded to the golden elixir, and has a little confidence. However, the Samadhi True Fire in his body only has one color. You can tell the reason why it was found in which sect's classics, and what materials he wants to go out to find, fully upgrade the Samadhi True Fire to a mature form, and then find a reason to travel outside, right? So by the middle stage, there is no need to read at all. Readers don't know why the protagonist wants to go out for a trip, and you, the author, don't write about it. Anyway, the protagonist just wants to go on a trip. The sense of immersion is very poor and it can't be watched.

Quickly withdraw, fearing that you will see Athena and Zeus Hades come out for you later. If you write a good immortal novel like this, you won't be able to copy it.

I have just read a few chapters and the writing is okay. I don't know what will happen next. The first paragraphs are a bit too long. I suggest the author read the paragraphs of classic online articles and hope to finish them in the end.

Give you a good review and encourage you.

Don't be too mean.

I was against Teacher Zhi's withdrawal from the literary world.

For me, I think this book is quite interesting, and the plot and plot are very unique. The descriptions of Taoism and cultivation of immortality are also very reasonable.