Controlling the Beast: Predicting the Future

Overall, the writing is okay, but there is still a lot of room for improvement. Your writing on this subject is also good, dual souls. Dual beast masters and dual talents, but the protagonist feels a bit unworthy of the protagonist in choosing the master beasts. As a time traveler, be a protagonist. As a beauty party. The protagonist himself said in the article that he likes good-looking things. But, it still hasn't been realized later. The pet I chose is not powerful and domineering at all, and its appearance is also low. I picked it up on the roadside. Even if you choose a fox. Or a bird with Phoenix bloodline. Or some elves. Some dragons with dragon blood will also do. If it really doesn't work, it's okay to arrange an angel for the protagonist. Besides, the protagonist's biggest cheat is also you, the author. Just write two plug-ins for the protagonist. Write two strong thugs for the protagonist. It's not impossible. Write a heroine for the protagonist

You mean this school has been maintained for a year or two, and then all the people except the protagonist and the protagonist's friends were poached, and the principal could not keep anyone? The principal gave the protagonist one or two million, let alone everyone else. Did the No. 1 Middle School and the No. 2 Middle School give everyone several million? Otherwise, how can we poach them away? Why would No. 1 Middle School and No. 2 Middle School poach waste if they have so much money? Hundreds of millions of dollars can be spent on one person and it won't just take off.

1: The writing is too poor and the content is watery. 2: There are many poisonous points, especially the college entrance examination plot, which is particularly poisonous. The early villains, the Gu family, whether they were targeting Gu Wumian or cheating on the college entrance examination and targeting the protagonist, their methods were all very childish. In the college entrance examination, he directly sent a message to his own Shen Wu Nian, asking him to target the protagonist. Later, Shen Wu Nian was defeated and wanted to recruit the protagonist into his own sphere of influence to target him. He actually didn't know how to hide his expression and directly recruited the protagonist with a dark face. Then there is the college entrance examination. You have designed a chicken-eat-style exam, as well as a poisonous circle. You have also designed a mutant queen bee that can detoxify. As a result, the content of your exam is the same as if you didn't write it down, it is just a running account. There is no battle plot at all, and no actual content at all. It just means that one hour has passed and the protagonist has the highest points. Two hours have passed and the protagonist has the first points. Three hours have passed and the protagonist has the first points. Anyway, the protagonist is invincible and has always been the first in points. Later, Shen Wu Nian came over to target the protagonist. The fight between the two people was like a running story, and they said a few words, and then started to skip. Anyway, the protagonist was running and scoring points, and Shen Wu Nian kept chasing. Then suddenly, only the protagonist and Shen Wu Nian were left, and then Shen Wu Nian was killed. Oh, what Shen Wu Nian wrote is like a mentally retarded person. When he opens and shuts his mouth, it means "how dare you" after

Let's not talk about the nondescript plagiarism setting of Sequence Zero Magic Potion. Just talking about the creation of the protagonist, he has been steady from the beginning, but what are you doing in these chapters? He treats Chu Tianling as his sister and attaches too much importance to the stick. It is obvious that the author wants to bring some funny attributes to the protagonist, but do you have the writing style? You are still burying pitfalls and foreshadowing. Just look at the way you bury them. You can imagine how shocking it is when you fill them in. Can we take it one step at a time? I really like the book, but I don't want to tear myself to death if I take a big step and pull my crotch.

Don't update if you don't want to. I don't know how to write villains and battles, so I have to write hard. As a result, my writing and thinking can't keep up, and the update is delayed again and again. I can write about cultivating my own beasts, but I have to write the battle scenes that I have written in a mess. I have to write some villains, and I have to write Ruozhi, Ambush. I didn't even think about whether I could control it before. From the beginning of the Time Tribulation Ice Dragon, why it was led by the fallen to the protagonist's city and why the protagonist was the only survivor who was not frozen. The seeds of the golden apple won by Cloud Cat, the memory-altering Gu pulled out by the Evolved God, the identity of the fishing old man and the Evolved God entering the abyss, and which fallen organization the ghost elders behind the two fallen twins in Qiming City belong to, and the twin cats were affected by the pollution of the abyss by the Mountain Swallowing Dog. Why were the spiritual cultivation space and the spiritual beasts in it not affected? Has Feng Lin's volcanic skill proficiency increased after participating in the preliminary round of the Young Dragon Cup? How much has it increased? Where did the ritual power collected after winning the final go? After the baptism of dragon blood, when can I use the advance future improvement to get it from the nightmare dragon? The skills obtained, whether the Heaven Control function can enhance the Twin Cats' Hundred Tribulation Tiger Roaring Thunder, where the power of the Dog Tail Jujube Tree went and what its use is, why the Deep Sea Ao family wants the Jade Vein Dragon, and whether the owner of the Sky Emperor in the small world can advance to the Evolution Palace and use the Evolution True Eye and the Dragon Bone Sign for Divination How to collect the power of incense... If you don't fill in these pitfalls, why should you fight with the other Four Saint talent holders? This is still the protagonist, and there are also a lot of pitfalls on other supporting characters, such as whether the squad leader has obtained the Nirvana Phoenix Fire, how many people know about Lin Qingshuang's talent, and why the Gu family uses " "The God-Building Plan" is about cultivating Shen Wu Nian and their family's 100,000-year luck. Is Zi Ji Tong ready to kill the Luck Wudao Dragon? If this pile of pitfalls is not filled, a bunch of childish fight scenes have to be added, and a bunch of things are imposed for the halo of the protagonist. The people around him are good to the male protagonist and have a good relationship with the male protagonist. They are all beauties, and the male characters are basically incompatible with the protagonist. The only male character is a sleeping beauty because of his young hair. He wants to open a harem as soon as possible. If you don't know it, you would think you are a masculine person. From the beginning to the end, there is almost nothing to watch except cultivating the beast and getting along with your own beast, because it is ugly.

Generally speaking, the character conflicts are too abrupt, and people often ridicule them for no apparent reason, and then the protagonist slaps him in the face, and the cycle continues, plus the author is too good at word count.

I have the idea, but the writing is not good, so I just talk about hunting rabbits. As someone who has never been to the countryside, I know that if a dog barks, the rabbit will definitely run or hide. As a result, the protagonist doesn't know it yet. He has to go through a series of experiences before he knows that Bai Chuanchuan has studied for so many years. I feel like it's not that the protagonist doesn't know, but that the author wants to overstate the number of words and introduce why and so on to the readers. But readers are not fools either. They get it once or twice. It's really boring to do this often.

There is less of a deliberate show-off and face-slapping session. It would be too embarrassing for old bookworms, and it also looks stupid.

I was speechless at the first picture. Reality can still be stronger from generation to generation🤗. Can this damn thing be called extraordinary? Are you willing to be a weakened contemporary peak existence? You think you are Gm🤐

What's the point of reading these days if it's not a cool article? It's even worse if it's so brainless.