
Ayasudan
About This Novel
Once the marriage book was ruined, Yue Lao's young apprentice Xiao Xianyin got the wrong red thread and went down to earth to change it. But I discovered that there is love that cannot be expressed... ?
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Official(2)Scraped 3d ago
nice
It can be seen that the heroine is a lively girl like the author, but the brackets are a bit too many and appear too frequently, which makes it confusing. If used once or twice occasionally, the effect will be very good and it will be easier to highlight Xiao's character, but using it so frequently will have the opposite effect. It is recommended that the parentheses be removed appropriately and instead be replaced by direct psychological description, which may be better. Of course, this is just my humble opinion, don't spray it if you don't like it.
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Community(0)
Official(2)Scraped 3d ago
nice
It can be seen that the heroine is a lively girl like the author, but the brackets are a bit too many and appear too frequently, which makes it confusing. If used once or twice occasionally, the effect will be very good and it will be easier to highlight Xiao's character, but using it so frequently will have the opposite effect. It is recommended that the parentheses be removed appropriately and instead be replaced by direct psychological description, which may be better. Of course, this is just my humble opinion, don't spray it if you don't like it.







