A Layman in the Courtyard

It looks okay, but there are a lot of things inside that don't stand up to scrutiny. Especially the character design of the protagonist, I don't really like it.

The timeline persuades me to quit and write a Siheyuan fan. The inherent settings cannot be changed (timeline, basic character settings, courtyard layout, original plot reasonable settings, etc.), But everything else can be changed (character, behavior, relationships, adding characters, etc.). If you want to make major changes, you might as well just create the original era. If you just want to write a fanfic, you can change it if you want to change it if it is related to the protagonist. For example, when you want to cut off something, you can only push it back, not in advance. (The following is purely a rant) You can't think it's been 65 years since the plot started, and Qin Huairu hasn't married yet. You can't have the third uncle become the first uncle and still live in the backyard. You can't force the deaf old lady to be a martyr military relative or a five-guarantee household for her. After her death, the street will take over all the houses and take them back to the state. After making a will, she won't use any inheritance rights, but she will still earn what she robbed. When a veteran, an orphan of a martyr, or a family member of a soldier passed by her house, she, Jia Zhang, would point her nose at the little bastard, kill her, kill her with a thousand cuts, and even make false accusations. Who gave him the confidence? A serious section chief, engineer or technician, Yi Zhonghai dared to threaten and extort others, kidnap them morally, set rules for them, and even indicated his intention to retaliate. Who gave him the confidence? A department-level security unit that is independent of the factory area, the police, and the streets. The team has various firearms, even anti-aircraft guns, a security guard armed with guns at all times, and even in the presence of the police, he is so stupid that he dares to go up and fight, even shouts that he will be killed and maimed, and even says to be careful walking at night and fall, who gave him the courage. A person who can say harsh words in front of the director of the sub-district office, even if the king of heaven comes, I have the final say, and even say that he can't get out of this yard, he is a little mediator in his bangs, who gives him the right. We were still under military control, and the street office had not yet been established. We were just called the first uncle, the second uncle, and the third aunt. Yan Jiecheng was originally the eldest brother, but he had to be called the second brother Yan Jiekuang. Liu Guangfu, ranked third, is still in junior high school, but his younger brother Liu Guangqi, who is five or six years older than him, got married and ran away with his wife a few years ago. Hundreds, thousands, and tens of thousands of tons of grain and meat are scattered out. Do you think your brain is better than others? I was given a gift of 888 Zhang Tuan Tuan. My mother-in-law took it and said it was a little too little. Can you fucking believe this? Various types of work, levels, administration, positions, and grades are either more or less, or they are made up and do not correspond to reality. I've read it, and some of it was written like this. I wanted to crawl over along the network cable, grab his collar and lift it up to open his eyes so he could see what it was like. Really, I wanted to put a knife on his neck and make him change immediately. You say he is ignorant, he also knows how to write novels, but you say he is not ignorant, he has no knowledge at all and just messes around. I don't know what those authors and studios think. You can't do this if you want to make money. But if you read more and know more about that era, you won't write like this. Even Dahei Shi and Da Tuan Tuan don't know about it. Some will add a sentence, which has been changed in advance for the convenience of reading. Some of them are really only using the Great Unity in 1951, and they will also fight with readers and greet all the women in the readers' families. The comment section is full of color.

Putting aside everything else, I just want to ask you, 13 years old and only 1.5 Meters tall. How do you ride the 28-meter big bar? Don't tell me that you put your feet through the tripod and pedaled while standing. You went back to your hometown and pedaled while standing for more than four hours? Have you ever seen the Erba Dagang? It weighs several dozen kilograms and is more than one meter tall. A child of more than 1.5 Meters rides on a 28-meter large bar . Your special code stands as tall as a car. You are riding a woolen yarn.

This timeline is very accurate. When reading chronology, you must see an accurate timeline to feel comfortable. When something happens, there must be no chaos. What happened in the courtyard at what time, the age of the characters, etc. Would look very awkward if they were messed up. The author is awesome!

The relationship with the Lou family is too taken for granted. Even now, the big boss cannot treat his factory worker's hospital son as his nephew, let alone a capitalist who came from the Republic of China. Regarding Lou Xiao'e's finding Xu Damao as her son-in-law, it wasn't that Lou Bancheng didn't see distinctions between rich and poor, it was because the subsequent division of family members made him see the crisis. Think about it and you will know that even the author yourself would not be able to marry your daughter to the child of an ordinary worker under your own command, let alone help or even save a life.

It is full of loopholes, it can be said that it was written randomly.

I felt like I couldn't stand the first picture. It looked like it was written on a computer. Pushing a cart is a life-saving grace. There are still millions of cubic meters of space. Why don't you write that the earth is so big?

The heroine of the fan fiction is so pitiful. She doesn't even know how many men she has. Emperors in ancient times choose concubines, rich people in modern times do beauty pageants, and they don't know how to open a harem as a time traveler.

Where did the good reviews come from? I was confused. Is this a period piece written as if it were modern?

Although it has nothing to do with the Siheyuan, it's pretty good, updated and updated,,,