Rebirth in the Southern Song Dynasty and Seek Immortality

The sentences read smoothly and there was no problem with sentence breaks, but the plot was very lacking. The plot of the fanfic does not want to follow the original drama, which is originally a good thing, but the premise is that the author must have a plot arrangement that is at least not boring. Although the novel is derived from life, it is more important to be higher than life. Let's talk about small aspects, try not to write plots that seem repetitive, especially plots that are not liked by the audience, and don't mention them repeatedly, otherwise you will be trying to persuade them to quit. For example, you wrote several times that the protagonist went to find the Bodhisattva Snake but failed to find it. This in itself is a plot that is not liked by the audience. Even if the author wants to foreshadow the writing, he should not write it like this. By the way, here is a successful way to write the ambush writing. If you want to set up a foreshadowing, it must be enough to impress people when it is finally revealed. For example, in a spy story, a group of lurkers were based in a barber shop. One mission resulted in their entire army being wiped out, but fortunately the enemy failed to capture them alive. It should have ended here, but the enemy suddenly discovered that several of the dead personnel had had haircuts, so they immediately thought that their stronghold might be a certain barber shop, and now the search range was much smaller. In fact, when describing the plot of the barber shop before, it was mentioned that several of them were getting haircuts together. This small detail did not feel special to the readers when they first read it. But when the enemy finally discovered it, the readers were suddenly shocked. This means that the ambush was successful. In addition, I know you don't want to write the protagonist to have adventures one after another, but if you don't do this, you won't write another kind of excitement. How can the audience applaud you? Another book with a similar concept to yours has set a good example in this regard, "Entertaining Spring and Autumn". The author of this book does not like fantasy novels that only describe martial arts dramas, so he describes another kind of excitement, that is, literary fighting, using modern entertainment methods to compete with local fantasy warriors in a battle of wits and courage. The author's writing is very exciting, and many details are amazing. In the end, even if readers do not completely agree with the author's views against martial arts dramas, they can still applaud the content he wrote! So when you want to object to a certain way of writing, you must come up with another way of writing that is exciting enough.

I like to read time-travel martial arts novels, but I really can't stand this one. The original protagonist acts like a fool and gives away secret books everywhere. It's really disgusting.

It is not recommended for those who have read Jin Yong's novels or TV series. As we all know, Jin Yong's martial arts system has a downgraded structure. As a result, the secret books of Murong Fu's family were not as good as the introductory internal skills of Quanzhen's teachings, and they also gave away cheat books. After reading about 20 chapters, I thought that the previous cheat books were derogatory enough. However, around chapter 20, the secret books started to be given away again, and I couldn't bear it👦

I started reading online novels with Piaomiao in 2005, and there are few novels that I can keep reading. The main reason is that the world view and structure of novels are difficult to control. Many novels have all the stories in the first 100 chapters, and it is difficult for new stories to appear later. The author of this book was able to cleverly arrange the story structure to attract me and I was still unfinished after reading it. Thank you very much! !

Learn second-rate basic martial arts by yourself and pass on first-rate martial arts to the whole village. People have nothing to do with you and are not kind to you. You are not a relative and have no apprenticeship. Are you responsible for the misbehavior after learning martial arts? It is useless to say that Nan Murong's martial arts Dou Zhuanxing is rubbish. The Quanzhen basic internal skills you learned are flawed. I don't know, I thought you were learning Wang Chongyang's innate skills.

Let me not talk about why Murong Bo's grave was not dug. Do you look down on Murong Bo, Murong Fu and Xiao Feng? Wang Chongyang practices the Xiantian Kung Fu, while his seven useless disciples practice the Quanzhen Heart Technique. You tell me that the Murong family's Heart Technique is not as good as the Quanzhen Heart Technique. Don't tell me that Guo Jing, he practices the Nine Yin Manual, is useless when he practices the Quanzhen Heart Technique! Forget it, you have to highlight the protagonist's awesomeness, and then you give away the Murong family's mentality! ! ! Damn, you are so generous! Are you so sure that you can keep suppressing them without being repulsed? Are you so sure that they won't spread their inner thoughts? Eight generations of the Murong family are really grateful to you! Pass on the inner teachings for them and spread them all over the world! ! ! Okay, these are my thoughts after reading the book. If any of you want to criticize me, feel free to criticize me. Anyway, I will delete the book and leave, so I won't be able to read it again.

Under normal circumstances, there is not so much fighting and killing, it is just an ordinary life. In 700 years, there is not much happening. As soon as you go out, you encounter all kinds of people looking for trouble for the protagonist. Besides the problem of getting stronger and stronger in martial arts, it can only be said that others are not looking for the right path. Even if they find the right path, they may fail in the process of exploration.

I didn't read the latter part, but after watching the first 20 or so pictures, I couldn't stand it anymore. I really thought it was too poisonous. The protagonist is an adult after all, and he didn't even know the dangers of the world. Moreover, I really thought it was too poisonous and idiotic to deal with the mental methods of the Murong family. Do you, a little second-rate person, deserve to evaluate the internal skills and mental methods of a family that has produced top masters for generations? Just like you, a primary school graduate, are you qualified to comment on the papers published by other people's Ph. D. S?

I'm speechless. I just give everything away. This is the author's idea. He wants to write about a hero who turns out to be a brainless virgin. He gives a book of internal energy to a stranger whom he meets for the first time for no reason. I am really speechless. Seeing this, I can imagine that what follows is basically rescuing people, giving away suitable things, recognizing a few good brothers, and finally becoming a hero. Routine and novice

This kind of fool is quite rare, taking the initiative to give others exercises