Pinyueyin

Continuity is the most basic thing

Oath: I have been promoted to level one in one year (I am now level one, hehe!), Level three in two years (don't laugh, it's not easy), level four in three years (I feel very powerful already), and I have become a level five master in five years (haha, haha). Please witness it!

Overall rating: 71 Author: Lexi Taixu Writing (14/20) The writing style of the youth campus series basically makes all the characters cheerful and cheerful. He has a brisk tone, makes jokes from time to time, and has no major dyslexia. Similarly, joyful moments are divided into occasions, and some joyful moments can destroy the artistic conception. Therefore, in terms of portrayal and maintenance of the scene, it is necessary to maintain reasonable preservation, and try not to ruin the atmosphere because of the characters' off-line complaints. Basically all the characters are a little bit dramatic. Ziwei, who has a cold personality, also has the demeanor of a young man who wants to roar. The other characters more or less have this tendency, giving them a sense of déjà vu in Chinese comics. Another obvious problem is the scene switching. The previous sentence is still in this scene, and the next sentence is a dialogue that opens another scene. This is a scene change in film and television works, because vision directly affects the senses, and as text, it is a secondary transformation. This kind of scene will be a bit abrupt. You can add time, location, environment, etc., Or directly click on the ellipsis to divide the scene. Beginning (13/20) The story begins with Pinyue, who has her fifteenth birthday, coming to Yinyue Pavilion and turning on her superpower. Her superpower is to cut her hair constantly, so she is also the hair girl chosen by God. And with the emergence of her superpower, she can see little monsters and ghosts, so the fighting girl always likes to be a peacemaker in front of ghosts. Generally speaking, it has a relaxed campus style. The monsters are not as harsh as expected, nor are they hoarsely bloody and violent. Although bleeding and injuries are inevitable, there is still a relaxed tone that advances the story. In terms of rhythm, the first paragraph is a bit slow in order to depict a happy girl, and there are all kinds of complaints and noises in the follow-up. It's a bit like being in the excitement stage of just starting out and writing whatever I see. It is not until later that the monster is seen and the series of strange things that happen to the heroine come to the point. They are all near misses, after all, the hero has not always been angry about his presence. Plot setting (14/20) There is a grand worldview involving time travel and world turmoil. The other side of the human world is a world where monsters are rampant. The background is the light ancient style of Chang'an Street, which is simple and has a sense of history. The events in the article are very short, basically one story in three or two chapters. The main plot is hidden in the short stories one episode after another. It is not very clear. The girl's communication with the ghosts at school supports the purposeless plot in the early stage. There is also the male protagonist Zi Wei, although he is always cool, he still sounds like a little adult. There are a lot of interesting contents in the setting, including two eggs hatching shikigami, weird weapons, and various costumes. It always feels like a Japanese version of "Onmyoji". I haven't gone over the details of the settings later on, but traveling through time and space and going back to the past to influence the collection of materials are also quite bold ideas. In addition to being a little immature, I need to slowly improve my details. This part is the same as the writing style, with some omissions, but part of it is a matter of style and part of it is a matter of accumulation. Overall impression (15/20) Among women's videos, romance lines have a smaller proportion in supernatural stories. The girl's growth story becomes more stable later on, and the writing also improves significantly. Another highlight, there is something heartwarming about every story.

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