Rebirth: Sword Jingxian

I just read more than 30 chapters, and the plot jumps quickly and confusingly. The character introductions are unclear. People who were present in the previous chapter suddenly disappeared in the next chapter.

According to the way you write it, it would be better to just write that the protagonist is reborn. There is no sense of an online game at all. I advise you to change the partition. You thought it was an online game and it still had an NPC feel, but you were disappointed.

I dare not comment blindly, for fear of someone using a nine-tooth rake to comb my hair, peeling apples with a fangtian painted halberd, smashing walnuts with a jade seal, knitting a sweater with a golden hoop, climbing up high-voltage wires to play Dongfeng Po for me, and finally calling me Xiu'er.

Not so good, the pig's feet are a bit useless.

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In Chapter 198, an NPC actually told the player how to get favorability and contribution points? According to the previous content of this book, it is impossible and should not be possible for local NPCs to know these words. Local NPCs' understanding of players should only be limited to immortals and foreign visitors. They have no idea that players can see contribution points and so on in NPCs. Even if they heard players say it, they would not know it. We know how favorability and contribution value come from. It is difficult for ordinary players to say this about favorability and contribution value. But for high-end players, they will not doubt whether you are an NPC turned into a player, but they will definitely doubt whether you are a GM or something. After all, only real people will know these words. Of course, it is not ruled out that these players may have little experience, so they may not be able to see it for a while, or it may be that the game is deliberately set like this. I can understand the first possibility, but what about the second one? In fact, in the game, prompts about these contribution values ​​and favorability are usually answered by system elves or game help. It is rarely answered by plot NPCs (the protagonist in this book should belong to the plot NPC category), because this will destroy the sense of immersion in the game. That's probably it. Maybe because I have read the novel for a long time, I may be picky about some details. Others may not think anything of it, but this loophole destroyed part of my sense of immersion in the novel. Not to mention I feel uncomfortable. I hope the author will pay more attention to it in the future. I am not asking you to change the plot. You can continue to write the plot according to your own ideas, but you need to improve the setting and logic.

See the dramatic progress of the plot later. . Let's look at the author who often says there isn't much profit. Although the author said he doesn't know how to be a eunuch, the plot has already collapsed after reading chapter 350. The previous writing was quite good, but maybe later the author saw that there was no benefit and let himself go. I can only say it's a pity

I come from the water experience and build a building haha

The author updates so slowly, you will lose us sooner or later

Why do the books I chase always end up in the palace?