Douluo: the Ultimate Chaos Qingxuan

(It has already been popular, and it will definitely explode if you put it in! See the picture below) It's on the shelves! It's on the shelves! Have you cast Big Brother? Look over here! The more soldiers Han Xin has, the better. I will not reject anyone who comes!

There are very few humanities in Dou 4, and the audience is small. The most important thing is that the overall situation has been decided. The circle of great gods is dominated by Tang San, Douluo Xing is also named Tang, and the blue salted fish trick is extremely powerful. If you write Dou 4 and get a Chaos Qinglian martial spirit, you can still level up. , It's better not to write, Dou 1 Dou 2 Dou 3 fanfic, the readers are too aggressive, only Dou 4, the readers are too lazy, I hope the author can improve it, don't think about the protagonist and Lan Xianyu fighting at the same level, why fight with him at the same level when you can be far ahead?

Single female protagonist, don't have multiple female protagonists. Romantic dramas are pretty good now. If there were multiple female protagonists, half of the readers would probably run away.

It's this kind of idiot again. Damn it, I can't understand it. He's like a fucking love brain. If you want to practice, just practice. Will the Tao die? Just practice the ruthless path, I'll give you a little bit, damn it, there's nothing at all, I instantly fell in love with it, damn it.

Who do you want to see as the heroine? I don't know who will be the heroine in Dou Si, so I'll collect some ideas.

It's a mess, it's very watery, the plot is copied from the original work, only the chance of the original work is chance, nothing else counts, except for robbing the things mentioned in the original work, the author can't think of anything. So far, Chaos Qinglian only has a few lotus soul skills, and it takes two or three soul skills to open the field at the same level. Differentiating the innate treasures is also against the sky. The God-killing Spear can compete with the Seven Killing Sword. The Qiankun Cauldron can only purify metal impurities. Thousand Forgings and Ultimate Spiritual Forgings cannot do it. The other treasures have not yet shown their effects; the Five Elements Golden Pill can only control the five elements.

The male protagonist wants to be like a turtle man, not watching the frozen swing being kissed, and hugging the opposite waist from behind, like an incompetent slave, yes

Coming from tweets, to be honest, from what I've read, I don't know what you want to write at all, and you probably don't know what the audience wants to see. You may even be a little unfamiliar with Douluo, although the possibility is a bit small The first and most important thing is that you have no goal. To be more precise, your protagonist has no goal. He stands on top of the world briefly. To be honest, this is not a goal at all. The most important role of the goal is to let the readers know what the protagonist is going to do, such as the most traditional revenge flow of the genocide, and those pretending It's a slap in the face, at least it's a specific goal. Even if it's a systematic novel, it still has a main line, and it can also play a role in letting readers know what the protagonist is going to do. But look at the protagonist in your novel, there is no subjective initiative at all. Is it possible that you want to write that your protagonist is growing up? The most obvious thing is that you, the protagonist who forced you to travel through time, have no determination to become a strong person. , If you want to write a good story, you just open up the hook a lot, and the *** is still downgraded, it is outrageous, it is too damn turtle, and the room is lazy and messy, it can even be said to be your puppet. This so-called plot is just a boring show performed under your hands. You have not reflected his own thoughts at all, no thinking, no reflection, no progress, and you can't even fully open the hook. Well, in short, your protagonist has no personality, or if he does, it's not distinct enough. But this is bearable. After all, I have read so many of my novels, and the protagonist is usually a default thing, and I can't tell what it is. The second and most important thing is, you don't understand anything at all. At least there aren't these dozens. You don't want to write a golden dozens, right? Taking me as an example, what I want to see the most is just the following points, the same goal with Dou Yi by different paths, the development line, the emotional line, the line of torturing the Tang family, or maybe the acquisition of girls, just playing games, it's not interesting at all. After your awakening, the protagonist has barely improved? After absorbing a soul, if you haven't reached level 20, how can you level up? This is the author's problem of leveling up, but it seems that other methods have not improved, as if you have done Tai Chi. The development line is almost broken, the emotional line is whatever, you can see a little bit, but not much. Abusing the Tang family has almost nothing to do with the Tang family. Taking in a daughter is almost contradictory to the emotional line. From what you ask the heroine, this is almost impossible. Or you can add a plot line that promotes the original model. If this is not the original model, what can be promoted? It can be passed over in one stroke. Who is watching this? Suddenly I remembered that it seemed that I was not familiar with Douluo Four. Well, it seems to be my problem. . But overall, in chapters 20 and 30, you did almost nothing. The protagonist's characteristics are average, the interesting progress is almost zero, and there is no motivation to watch. The above are all personal subjective opinions. I'll say what I need to say first.

It's a bit of a waste of the setting, and it also wastes the original work. Can't you figure out everything in Chaos Qinglian? As long as the Douluo Universe comes out, it will have to be rebuilt. You can play around with the God-killing Spear. I'm not afraid that Tang Ritian will kill you. Also, this thing can directly attack the soul. Those virtual toys are very annoying even if they are not dead. Even the Dou Si family members stopped acting, and Shi Tang just did whatever he wanted in the name of justice. Your whole body is worthy of seducing you like a slut, but you still want to be objective and neutral. Why can't the person in front of you who has lost his memory several times make you remember better? The heroine can't withstand the infusion of Poseidon's spirit. It can only be said that love plots can perfectly ignore all kinds of hidden clues about estranged people, just like love TV dramas never talk about daily necessities.

Dou 4 fanfic? I guess it's just a romance novel in the guise of a fan, and it still has some fighting power, so whatever, let's just treat it as a time travel to Tang San🐶