Douluo: the Ultimate Chaos Qingxuan

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There are very few humanities in Dou 4, and the audience is small. The most important thing is that the overall situation has been decided. The circle of great gods is dominated by Tang San, Douluo Xing is also named Tang, and the blue salted fish trick is extremely powerful. If you write Dou 4 and get a Chaos Qinglian martial spirit, you can still level up. , It's better not to write, Dou 1 Dou 2 Dou 3 fanfic, the readers are too aggressive, only Dou 4, the readers are too lazy, I hope the author can improve it, don't think about the protagonist and Lan Xianyu fighting at the same level, why fight with him at the same level when you can be far ahead?

Single female protagonist, don't have multiple female protagonists. Romantic dramas are pretty good now. If there were multiple female protagonists, half of the readers would probably run away.

It's this kind of idiot again. Damn it, I can't understand it. He's like a fucking love brain. If you want to practice, just practice. Will the Tao die? Just practice the ruthless path, I'll give you a little bit, damn it, there's nothing at all, I instantly fell in love with it, damn it.

It's a mess, it's very watery, the plot is copied from the original work, only the chance of the original work is chance, nothing else counts, except for robbing the things mentioned in the original work, the author can't think of anything. So far, Chaos Qinglian only has a few lotus soul skills, and it takes two or three soul skills to open the field at the same level. Differentiating the innate treasures is also against the sky. The God-killing Spear can compete with the Seven Killing Sword. The Qiankun Cauldron can only purify metal impurities. Thousand Forgings and Ultimate Spiritual Forgings cannot do it. The other treasures have not yet shown their effects; the Five Elements Golden Pill can only control the five elements.

Who do you want to see as the heroine? I don't know who will be the heroine in Dou Si, so I'll collect some ideas.

The male protagonist wants to be like a turtle man, not watching the frozen swing being kissed, and hugging the opposite waist from behind, like an incompetent slave, yes

Coming from tweets, to be honest, from what I've read, I don't know what you want to write at all, and you probably don't know what the audience wants to see. You may even be a little unfamiliar with Douluo, although the possibility is a bit small The first and most important thing is that you have no goal. To be more precise, your protagonist has no goal. He stands on top of the world briefly. To be honest, this is not a goal at all. The most important role of the goal is to let the readers know what the protagonist is going to do, such as the most traditional revenge flow of the genocide, and those pretending It's a slap in the face, at least it's a specific goal. Even if it's a systematic novel, it still has a main line, and it can also play a role in letting readers know what the protagonist is going to do. But look at the protagonist in your novel, there is no subjective initiative at all. Is it possible that you want to write that your protagonist is growing up? The most obvious thing is that you, the protagonist who forced you to travel through time, have no determination to become a strong person. , If you want to write a good story, you just open up the hook a lot, and the *** is still downgraded, it is outrageous, it is too damn turtle, and the room is lazy and messy, it can even be said to be your puppet. This so-called plot is just a boring show performed under your hands. You have not reflected his own thoughts at all, no thinking, no reflection, no progress, and you can't even fully open the hook. Well, in short, your protagonist has no personality, or if he does, it's not distinct enough. But this is bearable. After all, I have read so many of my novels, and the protagonist is usually a default thing, and I can't tell what it is. The second and most important thing is, you don't understand anything at all. At least there aren't these dozens. You don't want to write a golden dozens, right? Taking me as an example, what I want to see the most is just the following points, the same goal with Dou Yi by different paths, the development line, the emotional line, the line of torturing the Tang family, or maybe the acquisition of girls, just playing games, it's not interesting at all. After your awakening, the protagonist has barely improved? After absorbing a soul, if you haven't reached level 20, how can you level up? This is the author's problem of leveling up, but it seems that other methods have not improved, as if you have done Tai Chi. The development line is almost broken, the emotional line is whatever, you can see a little bit, but not much. Abusing the Tang family has almost nothing to do with the Tang family. Taking in a daughter is almost contradictory to the emotional line. From what you ask the heroine, this is almost impossible. Or you can add a plot line that promotes the original model. If this is not the original model, what can be promoted? It can be passed over in one stroke. Who is watching this? Suddenly I remembered that it seemed that I was not familiar with Douluo Four. Well, it seems to be my problem. . But overall, in chapters 20 and 30, you did almost nothing. The protagonist's characteristics are average, the interesting progress is almost zero, and there is no motivation to watch. The above are all personal subjective opinions. I'll say what I need to say first.

This book is a rare Ultimate Douluo text. I gave it five stars for my large account. However, the further I read it with my small account, the more unbearable I felt. First of all, it was the leveling operation in the front. I could barely accept the leveling. There were no obvious poisonous points in the future. Then, I was just playing around with the God-killing Spear. Do I really think Tang Hao didn't exist? Although he is almost stunned now, it is easy to investigate an artifact. In the Shrek chapter, the heroine follows Dong Qianqiu most of the time. It can be said that they are best friends, but there is a rotten salted fish next to Dong Qianqiu. I was so panicked when I saw this, and then I still haven't figured out what the relationship between the protagonist and Tang San is? Isn't it anti-Three articles? ! The protagonist and Lan Xuanyu are almost friends. Shouldn't he destroy the entire Douluo Continent with one person? Then, it takes so long to fight the God-killing Spear and the Seven-Slay Sword, and then you talk about hiding your strength. Isn't it true that you have already taken out such a super divine weapon, and you still hide your strength? Then it was time to go to the Elf Star. There was almost no excitement going forward, and the emotional line with the heroine was not pushed much. Among them, the special training by Emperor Tian and the previous plot were disgusting to me. First of all, the heroine did not get any help. In fact, the heroine's last martial spirit in the original work was the Emerald Phoenix, which was because of Brigitte's soul. Then Brigitte is gone, and she can only live to be 50 years old. Protagonist: I can't do anything! ! ! ! ! ! Then looking back from here, you can find that the protagonist has no layout. Compared with Dou San's humanities of the same period, Jiang Xiu has been in the abyss plane for several years. He has collected the Ant Emperor and the Golden Dragon King's divine core, and is ready to stab Tang San's strange velvet Tongtianju. Zhao Xuanzhen had already dealt with Tang San's back-up men, and also obtained the Golden Dragon King's Divine Core. On the contrary, there is not even a single Super Douluo here with any fighting power. Moreover, this is the Ultimate Douluo. Super Douluo are everywhere. Most of the Ultimate Douluo are like dogs. There are several god-level figures. Does the protagonist want to blow up the entire Douluo world with one person? ? Obviously there is the martial spirit of Chaos Qinglian, the Five Elements Golden Pill and many super artifacts, and then I jumped to see the making of battle armor... ? ? ? ? ! ! ! In fact, Doukai is just like that in Douluo Continent. Even the six-character battle armor cannot increase the level of the God King. Moreover, the author has not read the Legend of Dragon King, so I can write about Doukai briefly, and then it will be watery for several chapters...? Hey, not the author? ! Then looking forward, the author designed multiple female protagonists. First of all, there was feedback from readers that the plot of this book with a single female protagonist is enough. In fact, I think it is the same, although the author's emotional line is not pushed, but stretched. But if there are multiple female protagonists, maybe there should be a lot of trouble? Don't do that kind of thing! ! ! ! Then from what I was looking at, the heroine couldn't tell who she was going to choose, and then the combat power of the cultivator was too low. And if it's a buddy, why don't you crush the salted fish to death? The protagonist gives me a feeling of drifting with the crowd, and he likes to hide his strength, but he actually doesn't have much strength. The author has come to read the fandom, and he must severely suppress other people's mouth! Then he said, "Fight three thousand emperors with one hand, crush millions of stars with two palms!" Or: "Whoever dares to claim to be invincible, and who dares to claim to be invincible, will never see the age of gods!" Or: "I'll give you time to catch up until you look up and disappear!" The protagonist is: "Leave it to the bad salted fish to challenge the level! I just need to put in a lot of money!" ? Then: Fighting with a five-ring seven-kill sword with a super artifact, and was suppressed for a while So: super artifact ≈ seven killing swords. ? Under normal circumstances, the super artifact will break if it scratches the Seven Kills Sword. Did it turn out that Sword Douluo was the first person below the god level? Ditian was so frightened that he was crying! ! ! Summary: I have seen the current middle and late stages. The protagonist has been drifting with the crowd. Except for the different birthplace, the main plot is the same as the original work. Then there is no cool point in the novel. I also saw the author's remarks, but the fun point is never a pretentious slap in the face. This kind of old-fashioned plot may only be seen in my father's era. It's just that the emotional line is not pushed forward. This is a small matter, but I am very curious about how the author handles the relationship between the heroine and Dong Qianqiu. I think the protagonist should take down Dong Qianqiu from the beginning, and then modify his memory. Jie Jie Jie Jie. If the protagonist and Lan Xuanyu fight in the later stage, then Dong Qianqiu must be killed, and then how to explain it to the heroine? Is it difficult to guess the mouth teeth? Are you going to be friends with Lan Xuanyu? And then become Tang San's guardian? When it comes to the relationship line, it's particularly slow. Regardless of the daily life, in fact there is no actual progress at all. Douluo Dalu can barely be considered an adult when he is twelve or thirteen years old, and then it was not until the recent few pictures that specific relationships were tied... To be honest, as long as there is a specific love line in Douluo Dalu, even if there are thirty female protagonists, no one will criticize them. The author's love line gives me a feeling of being in the water. What serious person can be friends all the time, only to tie up the relationship after seven or eight years? Then when I awakened my martial soul, I felt that the protagonist could perform in a matter of seconds, but the actual performance afterwards was just a mess. Anyway, the protagonist's level gave me the feeling that I was always competing against Lan Xuanyu, but the author did not write the corresponding feeling of satisfaction. Then Lan Xuanyu was showing off in various ways, especially when going to Elf Star and Bi Ji recommended Lan Xuanyu to the heroine. The heroine also thought about the various inner dramas with Di Tian. Cupid:. ? Strange people are immune to my love brain! ? Or... Protagonist: No! ! I can't do anything! ! Okay, that's an exaggeration, but I brought Lan Xuanyu into Elf Star. I only gave this book this rating, so feel free to criticize me.

It's a bit of a waste of the setting, and it also wastes the original work. Can't you figure out everything in Chaos Qinglian? As long as the Douluo Universe comes out, it will have to be rebuilt. You can play around with the God-killing Spear. I'm not afraid that Tang Ritian will kill you. Also, this thing can directly attack the soul. Those virtual toys are very annoying even if they are not dead. Even the Dou Si family members stopped acting, and Shi Tang just did whatever he wanted in the name of justice. Your whole body is worthy of seducing you like a slut, but you still want to be objective and neutral. Why can't the person in front of you who has lost his memory several times make you remember better? The heroine can't withstand the infusion of Poseidon's spirit. It can only be said that love plots can perfectly ignore all kinds of hidden clues about estranged people, just like love TV dramas never talk about daily necessities.