Purcell's Adventure in Another World

WSince you asked the question sincerely, then the master will guide you sincerely~ (What the hell) Actually, the apprentice's problem is not big. The main thing is to pay attention to the paragraphing issue. Some places can actually be combined into one paragraph. The abrupt paragraphing will make the article look a bit weird. The second is the detailed description and the further outline of the character's demeanor. The character's language description also needs to be strengthened. By the way, you don't need to give all the recommendation votes to the master every day. I have returned it to you. I will leave it to myself next time. Good boy, come on, apprentice, I love you.

In fact, there is another place, which is in your New Year's episode "Memoirs of the Protagonist and Non-Protagonist". Some emotions are not particularly easy to express, but you can capture the past of these characters to express your current emotions. In my opinion, it is a very high level. You are indeed a disciple of hope, come on, the author.

Well, I evaluated the God of War League very objectively. Although my first impression of Gaia was not good, he is indeed a master of fighting. Rey, my first impression was that he was wise and positive, but he also had the pain of losing his loved ones buried in his heart. Although Cassius only used a few words in the article, his serious and meticulous style came to life clearly on the page. ; Not to mention Black, I have to say that he is really good at disguising himself and can point out the problem to the point. He is also a strategist in the God of War Alliance. I guess even if he is not a strategist, he is still a dedicated actor; Muse, a female man, has always hidden the thought of "wanting to be coquettish to XXX", but shows his sincerity to his brother. Is this considered brother control?

As someone who talks nonsense, I don't have to expect long comments or anything like that. I can only cheer for you. To be honest, Xin, your update speed is fast and stable. This book is indeed your first, and your writing style is definitely not very good. When I read your book, I felt it was very bland for some reason. I thought it would be better if it progressed quickly and the writing was more bland and used more descriptions (note, it should be). I believe your second part will be much better than this one You should be one of the dedicated authors among many. Well, in short, I personally think the biggest shortcoming is that it is relatively bland (?) I sincerely hope your book is as popular as those of the big guys. It can be understood as making sarcastic remarks, yes, that's it

Well, I'm just telling you my personal opinion. In the new chapter, it is written about how many degrees Celsius the air is. I personally think this should refer to the temperature... Then, the details of fighting need to be worked out more carefully. Some of the language is a bit pale. In fact, if you check it carefully, adding a few more words will make it read much smoother, and the feeling will be much better. I won't give examples here. Finally, come on, Xin Sha!

It hasn't been a long time since I read this book. I only read it because of someone's Amway. The author's writing style is quite good. It was a little immature in the early stage, but now it can be said that it has matured a lot. The author is quite diligent in updating his articles, and his knowledge reserve is rich enough. The extra characters are written so that they touched my heart. Is that right? Seeing that it's almost over, I'm actually a little reluctant to let it go. When I read every novel, I always feel a little melancholy towards the end. This is the first part, and you will have a second part. I hope you can give the first part a happy ending. I don't really judge the quality of a book, I just think that good is good. That's all I can say I hope the author will continue to work hard Lianjueliu

However, I don't even know how to grab the red envelope/cheek support

Really, to be honest, this book is very scientific. Li Jiaxing (my classmate) told me: The Saier number has no scientific nature at all. But it's also from Purcell, and you can write so scientifically. I can't even do it, really... I don't know how to put it... I have seen very few such scientific game articles.

Ahhhhh, I want the second season, why is it so late? . I'll hit you on the head with my little fist. If I punch you, you might get a recommendation ticket😄😂

Author, update soon! ! !