
Dawn Chicken
About This Novel
Dead by Daylight, a small workshop game, everyone knows it, and forget it if you don't.
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Official(2)Scraped 13d ago
The subject matter is rare, the writing style is reluctant, and there are slightly more poisonous points.
I don't know what you mean by repeatedly emphasizing that a pig-footed man in his twenties whose mental age seems to be only 13 to 4 years old. Maybe it can't be expressed in your writing style, and the character's personality is not clear. The male protagonist doesn't behave like he has played games for many years as you wrote. He doesn't even know QTE and dares to say that he has played games for many years? You can rely on "novices" to get over many things, but you won't be able to write with that feeling. You need to practice your writing and change some places. I came from station B, so I was looking forward to it.
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Official(2)Scraped 13d ago
The subject matter is rare, the writing style is reluctant, and there are slightly more poisonous points.
I don't know what you mean by repeatedly emphasizing that a pig-footed man in his twenties whose mental age seems to be only 13 to 4 years old. Maybe it can't be expressed in your writing style, and the character's personality is not clear. The male protagonist doesn't behave like he has played games for many years as you wrote. He doesn't even know QTE and dares to say that he has played games for many years? You can rely on "novices" to get over many things, but you won't be able to write with that feeling. You need to practice your writing and change some places. I came from station B, so I was looking forward to it.










