Douluo: after Giving Tang San the Simulator, I Became Invincible

You can tell us which heroine you would like to watch in the comment area, but it is best not to have too big an age gap with the protagonist😘😘

It's pretty good so far, nothing bad about it. Can you ask the heroine in advance how she will arrange it?

When I first clicked on this book, I saw a review. I thought this was another kind of brainless fanfic. After all, there are too many licking and negative comments on Douluo. But after clicking on the review, I found some words posted by the author and clicked on the book to read it. There are indeed none of the problems mentioned in the review. This book is actually quite good, but the pace is a bit slow. So far, I have not found any poisonous points. It is edible.

Stop talking about Naruto, there are ten Douluo and eight Hokages. I don't think about using ai when it comes to skill names. Wouldn't it be okay to name that vegetation puppet the Immortal Body of the Azure Emperor? No matter how bad it is, it is called "Qingdi's Spirit Pointing Technique", "Lingshu Wooden Statue Jue", "Qingmu Taoist Soldiers" or "Cang Qiu Guard", none of which is better than the messy escape. If you don't want to use Qing Emperor, you can change it to Blue Silver. Don't be so lacking in imagination. If it doesn't work, just use AI. If you write a fanfic, you will screen out some readers, and if you mention Naruto, you will screen out another group of readers.

The poison test is over, it's quite interesting, but it should be a single heroine, and other heroines will be sent out to arrange CP. If you like the harem, you can withdraw it. I will withdraw it first. I will not watch it if it has already started.

The previous writing is remarkable, and there are no big problems with the overall writing style and plot rhythm. Although it's a bit slow-burning, it's still readable, but do you not want to write about Zhu Zhuqing's recent treatment? It directly violated the most poisonous point of the Incarnation novel when it was not the Incarnation novel. Transforming a person out of thin air is a big measure, but it is not unacceptable. As a result, he wrote a fanfic and gave the original character to the person who was transformed out of thin air. It was so poisonous that it was so poisonous that it would not be a problem if you didn't save him. Considering his talent and the way he acted when his sister chased him, the most he could do was to become a palace. Concubine, it's okay if you want to save him. Whether you take him in by yourself or take him away in one go, you won't open a harem if you take him in. You don't think it's anything. If you take him in in one go, even if you like him, you can only say a few words at most and you won't think it's poisonous. This weird treatment of you has successfully offended almost everyone. When I clicked on this paragraph, all the comments were scolding, which proves that I am not the only one who has such an idea.

It was originally kept, but later on, giving away the girl and the original supporting character was too much. Who thinks that the fandom is giving away the original heroine? This is a real gift, giving Zhu Zhuqing the emotional memories of a simulated and fictional character. It is simply giving away a girl, and she will not say anything at all. Also, Dai Tianyu has too many supporting roles. When you read a fanfic, you don't just come here to add drama to the supporting role. The best way to write a fanfic is to perfectly combine the original work with the original work. The original work is the main line and the original work is the auxiliary role. Many of them are overly dependent on the plot of the original work. You are overly adding your own plot, especially if it is a supporting role. It was originally written about the protagonist, but it was inserted in the middle to feel like it was a group portrait article, or a fake group portrait article based on "robots" created out of thin air by the system. It was too nondescript.

The writing is just right for the plot. It's like Tang San's dog. He gave jelly grass to women and taught him to do his duty with all his heart. You won't be scolded for raising a dog. You need two stars to give Xiao Wu a gift. Are you traveling through time to continue to bring your servility from the early stage to find a father to worship?

It's a little bit poisonous. As much as your expectations are, you will be disappointed.

First, whether you accept it or not, it feels like you are disgusting when you write this plot! Second, in terms of plot allocation, if you allocate a lot of emotional scenes to them, it feels like a watery plot! If you don't give too much plot, then you're forcing the pairing, and that's even more fucking disgusting! Third, the character itself is compressing the protagonist's role! You In terms of writing, the protagonist's role in the plot is not too much. If you press this, will I not be able to see the protagonist in the next 20 or 30 photos? Are you planning to reprint it? In the early stages of your book, the main character cannot be seen in a lot of the plot, or does it deviate from the plot? Fourth, from my personal point of view, can you not be like the third young master of the Tang family? Every male and female character needs to come up with a CP! Love If you don't fall in love in mainland China, you will die, right? As long as there is a single person who is not able to pursue him, will the world be destroyed? You are even more awesome, even if a character created by the void wants to fall in love!