Douluo Continent: Ancient Era

Is this the most ancient era of Douluo Continent?

Let's talk about the suggestions for the Golden Three Chapters first. (Wait a minute, I have to talk about sentence segmentation first. The use of symbols is great. It's not tiring to watch) Regarding the setting that the human race is very weak and miserable and is oppressed by the soul beasts, I recommend you to take a look at how this setting is presented in the first few chapters of Zhai Zhu's Humanity Supreme. When you explained this setting, the protagonist only mentioned it a few words, and it was only mentioned to show his importance to the tribe. The setting took a long time to write, but you are in the first chapter, baby! Such a rush to expand the worldview will not actually bring any deeper understanding to the rest of the text, because many of your scattered sentences later highlight this point, and everyone can read it. If you delete many of those worldviews, it will have little impact on the reading of at least the next five chapters. Readers are very forgetful. When you really need support for your worldview, why don't you ask someone else to read the first chapter? It doesn't matter if you put it to the back and dismantle it and gradually unfold it. This setting will be very popular if you use it well. You can really go to Zhai Zhu's book to learn from it, and insert it into the protagonist's story line bit by bit. The effect will be very good. Then let's talk about the person who looked very strong and killed Zhan Jiang. He really showed up! There is too little description! I turned a little faster (because I was a little sleepy) and accidentally skipped a beat. I took a closer look, "Who is this guy? He looks so naughty." Then I turned back and saw him appear. Although the appearance description and morphological description are really low, if you write such a paragraph, others will know roughly what kind of person this is at a glance, and then have a memory point. When most people remember people, what they remember is the character's most representative appearance. For example, if you ask me to talk about the supporting role of Ya Fei in Dou Po, I remember that she was particularly enchanting and caused countless men to bleed to death during the auction. Although she looked very vulgar and low, she left a deep impression on her. I can't remember any other specific incidents. (The protagonist doesn't have much memory in this regard) Then I will find that your descriptions are meticulous, but there is a question. Since there are so many plots in each chapter, which one do you want to highlight the most? Is it the reason why the protagonist is like that? What is the character of the protagonist? Find out what you want to tell the readers most and focus on the description. You can't just zoom in like a movie. Even if you describe it in detail, a novel is still a novel and cannot present a direct sense of the picture. You need to highlight the key points of the picture instead of giving a picture and letting the readers find it by themselves. Nothing else is a problem, come on! (I haven't finished reading it yet, I'll come back tomorrow)

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The world description in the first three chapters has been revised. I moved it to chapter 30, which should speed up the early pace.

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