Under the City
by Cheng Yuqing
About This Novel
There is such an evil tavern on the edge of the Yin and Yang realm, called the Qingdeng Tavern. There is a person in the tavern who wants to fulfill his worldly wishes and must exchange them for one thing. The human world in the tavern calls him the Ghost King... Anyone who is unwilling or obsessed with something too deep can get here. Do you know that the owner of the museum also has a story? PS: "In the past, he always felt that his body was like a piece of ice that would never melt, wandering aimlessly in the dark space, until one day he heard a "click", and a gap was opened in the dark sky, and the sparse sunlight generously poured down, melting him little by little..."
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Official(5)Scraped 3d ago
You can point out any mistakes and I will correct them.
Since it is my first time to write a book, if there are any mistakes in sentences or words, please feel free to point them out and I will correct them as soon as possible (´,,•ω•,,｀)♡
Updated, hope you like it≧∇≦
You can divide the paragraphs into more, and each paragraph should not be too long.
The writing is good, keep it up, there will always be results
The author's writing is very good!
I really like the author's writing style. There are many descriptions of the environment. The ideas are clear and the writing is smooth. Come on! ! ! ✿✿ヽ(°▽°)ノ✿ Although I like it very much, I still want to put forward some of my own opinions - I hope it will be of great help to you. First of all, the wedge guide can be removed. Because the two have similar meanings, and readers tend to like articles with passionate beginnings. ╭( ･ㅂ･)و If the author urgently needs to gain popularity, the highlights should be directly reflected at the beginning. It's not that there are no bright spots at the beginning of the big text, but the idea at the beginning is a little unclear, the world framework is not established well, and the protagonist is not reflected at the first moment, which will give many readers an illusion-who is the male and female protagonist? (๑•̌.•̑๑)ˀ̣ˀ̣ In fact, the names of the characters mentioned in the first chapter are slightly similar. I looked back and forth before I could tell them apart, which will cause some trouble for readers (maybe just me). ˚*̥(**⁰͈꒨⁰͈)*̥ Secondly, it is also a question raised by readers and friends in the comment area. The number of words in other paragraphs is generally okay, except for the description of the environment, which is a little longer, but it's passable. After all, if you use standard font size, it shouldn't exceed three or four lines - well, that's what I think. (OΔO) I think some environmental descriptions can be written in two paragraphs. For example, there is a passage in Chapter 4: "Smells with the fragrance of narcissus, tiny bits of sunlight shine through the hollow carved window alcove, and scattered on the ground. There is a window next to the couch, with exquisite carvings and rare wood. The remaining candle lights in the window are swaying and weak." The description of the environment here seems to mainly reflect the physical weakness of the characters below. At the same time, the "weak light" of the remaining candle reflects this point. Therefore, I feel that the sentence "The remaining candle light in the window is swaying and weak." Can be made into a separate paragraph to serve as an emphasis. ╭☞( ￣ ▽￣)╭☞ Emmmmmmmmm...... ʘʚʘga? The other ones are really well written! ! Just don't forget the punctuation marks:₍•ʚ•₎•ʚ•₎•ʚ•₎ Hehe, good night! Wish the book success! *⸜( •ᴗ• )⸝*
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Community(0)
Official(5)Scraped 3d ago
You can point out any mistakes and I will correct them.
Since it is my first time to write a book, if there are any mistakes in sentences or words, please feel free to point them out and I will correct them as soon as possible (´,,•ω•,,｀)♡
Updated, hope you like it≧∇≦
You can divide the paragraphs into more, and each paragraph should not be too long.
The writing is good, keep it up, there will always be results
The author's writing is very good!
I really like the author's writing style. There are many descriptions of the environment. The ideas are clear and the writing is smooth. Come on! ! ! ✿✿ヽ(°▽°)ノ✿ Although I like it very much, I still want to put forward some of my own opinions - I hope it will be of great help to you. First of all, the wedge guide can be removed. Because the two have similar meanings, and readers tend to like articles with passionate beginnings. ╭( ･ㅂ･)و If the author urgently needs to gain popularity, the highlights should be directly reflected at the beginning. It's not that there are no bright spots at the beginning of the big text, but the idea at the beginning is a little unclear, the world framework is not established well, and the protagonist is not reflected at the first moment, which will give many readers an illusion-who is the male and female protagonist? (๑•̌.•̑๑)ˀ̣ˀ̣ In fact, the names of the characters mentioned in the first chapter are slightly similar. I looked back and forth before I could tell them apart, which will cause some trouble for readers (maybe just me). ˚*̥(**⁰͈꒨⁰͈)*̥ Secondly, it is also a question raised by readers and friends in the comment area. The number of words in other paragraphs is generally okay, except for the description of the environment, which is a little longer, but it's passable. After all, if you use standard font size, it shouldn't exceed three or four lines - well, that's what I think. (OΔO) I think some environmental descriptions can be written in two paragraphs. For example, there is a passage in Chapter 4: "Smells with the fragrance of narcissus, tiny bits of sunlight shine through the hollow carved window alcove, and scattered on the ground. There is a window next to the couch, with exquisite carvings and rare wood. The remaining candle lights in the window are swaying and weak." The description of the environment here seems to mainly reflect the physical weakness of the characters below. At the same time, the "weak light" of the remaining candle reflects this point. Therefore, I feel that the sentence "The remaining candle light in the window is swaying and weak." Can be made into a separate paragraph to serve as an emphasis. ╭☞( ￣ ▽￣)╭☞ Emmmmmmmmm...... ʘʚʘga? The other ones are really well written! ! Just don't forget the punctuation marks:₍•ʚ•₎•ʚ•₎•ʚ•₎ Hehe, good night! Wish the book success! *⸜( •ᴗ• )⸝*
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