Show Your Prestige from the Dragon Clan

I haven't read it yet, but it's the first time I've seen someone writing about Ma Chao. As a top laner, I must read it.

By the way, in fan fiction, the heroine is a person whose name does not even appear in the original novel, so there is no sense of substitution at all!

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If the emotional drama is not well written, you still have to write so many scenes, and you are not writing a detective novel. Why do you describe so many scenes? , The plot advances so slowly. The protagonist feels so wet. I originally wanted to give it one star, but I'll give it two stars! Generally speaking it's pretty good

1: No knife, don't worry 2: I hope everyone will comment more 3: Regarding emotional scenes, I hope you can give me some pointers to see if I should give up some of them and focus on slaying dragons and monsters.

First of all, I would like to thank book friend 20170611184244116 for his long review and analysis. Only by facing shortcomings and loopholes can people grow. I hope everyone will pay attention to it. I can be considered a newcomer. To be honest, writing about dragons is quite stressful and challenging, especially after reading Brother Shui's book... So I want to write more relaxedly, but I can't be reckless. If you can't beat it, you can't beat it. Everything has to go through a process. I planned to write about the heavens from the beginning. I hope everyone understands.

Very well written. Why eunuch?

If Eriyi has a bad ending, I promise I will send you the blade every day. It would be even better if Eriyi is the heroine. I want Eriyi to have an extremely perfect life. The world owes her so much. I didn't see it in the original work, but I look forward to seeing it in your writing.

The explanation behind it feels like it's all gone. After four chapters, the plot moves forward slowly like a tortoise. Various explanations are added... [Null] Maybe I'm not patient enough, but this combat power is also something that can be solved with a flash of golden light at the beginning after returning from the master. Isn't it already 16 times faster to have fancy skills? You also need to drive. After adding Justeza, I didn't see how powerful it was, but the battle became complicated and confusing. For example, driving is unnecessary. The protagonist is n times faster than the car and is racing against the villain.

In the early stage, I created my own heroine to form a CP with the protagonist. In the mid-term, there were many second-generation characters. There was no sense of experience at all, the sense of substitution was extremely poor, and the combat power collapsed again and again. It almost gave me embarrassment.