Immortal Disciples in the Human World

· Damn it? ? ? Am I the first to comment? No one has read this book? The writing is okay! If you read it over at (Starting Point), leave a comment here Regardless of who the author is, I have always only read books and not recognized people! The only thing is whether the book is good, whether it can be read, how many people are there, and how many people are commenting on it? It's none of my business I read this book in the (starting point) recommendation. I thought it was good and I picked it up. It's still good there! Although there are hundreds of comments, I never thought it would be so miserable here? ! What a surprise ... First of all, the title of the book is well chosen! It also fits the story of this article. It's not a rebirth story, it's not a time travel story, it's not a system story! Although an old man also appears, we will probably meet him later... The overall plot is: Jianxu Villa (Yang Jing) witnessed his parents being killed when he was ten years old! When I was carrying them one by one for burial, an old man suddenly appeared The old man asked him, "Do you want your parents to come back to life? Do you want to take revenge? Do you want to become stronger?" The answer is yes. The old man passed on his skills (heavenly book) and took away the bodies of his parents (escrow) From then on, I practiced hard day and night for about ten years, but it was not enough because (Jianxu Villa) is now the lowest level (sub-level). They even came to our door to suppress us (forcibly confiscated them). ... In order for the villa to no longer be suppressed, for his fellow sects to no longer be bullied, and to resurrect his parents earlier, he began to plan step by step to absorb the higher-level (candidate-level) and (king-level) sects... The process is certainly difficult. . He himself is currently at a stage higher than (king level) and lower than (emperor level), and it may not take long for him to reach the emperor level. Can kill six or seven kings at a time It may seem like an ordinary book, but the writing is decent and the coherence is good! The wording is spot on! I hope it will be more scary later on. It would be better if it were more vivid As for whether this article belongs to (city) or (immortal), it doesn't matter. What kind of books don't have (gongfa? There are no immortal-like characters? It's enough if you can read it. Why choose so many ... The comment is that I remember the title of the book and will continue to follow it at the starting point. Why can't I get rid of it (thoughts)? ! There are two accounts that have starting points, but they are not called this (screen name). Readers who like it are recommended to take a look! It's not on the shelves yet, but it should be better in the future. Also hope the author works hard? [Let me make a name for myself: I am not a bastard! ] I have a lot of large ones

It is recommended not to change the previous dozens of chapters! Just put more thought into the subsequent plots. A bit bland (lack of passion) and not exciting enough! . Is this your first book?

I beg the book friends who read this book, or the book friends who accidentally clicked on this book, to give me some suggestions on the beginning of this novel. What are the bad parts? I want to change the beginning, but I don't know how to change it. It's uncomfortable.