Scientifically Cultivating Immortality Day by Day

[Author's Recommendation] A novel that is slightly more expensive to understand. The main content is that the protagonist is a high school student, but he obtains a female dependent spirit named Sanqian Huanyao, and this spirit is of the space system, and the two begin to take on some tasks to eliminate spiritual beasts. The story begins with the two going to an amusement park to fight spiritual beasts... The situation of this book is basically like that - it is said, but when you think about it, you feel like you haven't said anything at all. Personally, I feel that the problem mainly lies in the author's writing style. Overall, the author's writing style is too "jumpy", the coherence between the previous and later sentences is poor, and the readers are confused. Another situation is that there are some sentences in the novel that do not explain to the readers after switching the subject correspondent, such as this sentence, "But Tang Ying's worries are a bit unnecessary. After standing up from the ground, the beautiful scenery disappeared..." Who stood up from the ground? Here, after the subject is switched, a corresponding subject is obviously missing. On the other hand, the author's sentences also have some grammatical errors, and the author basically has no idea what he is talking about. For example, this sentence: "The woman stared directly at the guy with a mocking smile in front of her, not caring about herself but pulling on the collar." As for the first half of the sentence, "staring in front of you" is a bit strange, and "staring ahead" or "staring at the Tang Ying in front of you" seems to be a better description. As for the second half of the sentence, I have no idea what the author is talking about... The story is still okay. If the author can improve the writing style, I believe this will be a good book.

📝Cultivation of immortality scientifically day by day, Writing practice* has a long way to go. Encourage the top order. The book jacket is well received. It is a super small seedling with only 80,000 words. You can keep it for now. Please continue to update.