This System is a Bit Late

I can't give you a difference of 10 for fear of making you proud. Hehehe😘😘😘😘

The second world is broken. If you don't know how to write emotional dramas, don't mess around. This is directly like a stallion. It's not interesting to watch at all.

The writing is messy, and the grammar is so bad in some places that I can't even understand what's written.

Swallow the starry sky, fight to break, Wu Geng Ji, stars change, once upon a time there was a Lingjian Mountain, celebrating more than a year, the night will be, the fairy sword, the flower thousand bones

Didn't you graduate from elementary school or something? You can't even use punctuation marks clearly.

To be honest, this punctuation mark is really terrible. I want to persuade you to quit, but you can't change it. So many people insist on not changing it. Don't say that there is no such situation in the back. If you can't stand the front, why bother looking at the back? I don't know how it came to be past nine o'clock. Everyone pointed out the mistake to you. It's up to you whether to correct it or not.

How can I describe this emotional scene? I always feel like something is wrong.

I read more than twenty chapters of this book, but when I was ready to accept Li Mochou, I couldn't stand it anymore. The first reason is, what about the punctuation marks when speaking? Basically not, it looks very uncomfortable and uncomfortable. This is the most important point. The second thing is to accept Li Mochou. At the beginning, the protagonist himself said that he did not care about the love between his children. Now he is ready to accept Li Mochou in chapter 20. The golden finger in the book is a time and space gate. What should Li Mochou do if he goes to other worlds in the future? This is basically a problem that every martial arts space-time gate novel has to face when accepting a heroine, and this problem is very difficult to deal with. The third question is, I don't know if it's because I read it too fast. The protagonist's time travel and the Golden Finger Time and Space Gate are described too lightly in the book. The main character dies suddenly while reading the novel, and the Time and Space Gate also mentions that there is a bronze door in his mind. I have read more than 20 chapters on these three questions. The book review below says that the author is writing a book for the first time. It is very good to be able to write like this. As long as the punctuation marks are added, I can still read it after a while.

The author seems not to use punctuation marks...

Why is the next world not Hua Qiangu?