Gundam Shining Star
About This Novel
The book has been reset, and the new book "Gundam Brilliant Starry Sky" is being serialized. More originals, more exciting plots, Claire, Tina, and Joyce are waiting for everyone!
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Official(4)Scraped 4d ago
Please change it to third person, it's very uncomfortable.
It's well written. Personal pronoun is not really a problem, I just don't feel comfortable with it.
Opolis, grab that section. It looks very unappetizing. The heart of the Holy Mother explodes, the key is that the Holy Mother is the Holy Mother. After it's over. In the scene where Aslan is hesitant, the protagonist becomes a ruthless soldier again. The characters in the context and context do not match each other, which is confusing.
It's awkward and not satisfying to watch.
I feel like, in my opinion, the protagonist of this novel should be Claire. Lux and the others have all become villains, but the problem is that the protagonist is not invincible, so he feels very uncomfortable and was caught and plotted against. He is really incomparable to the Wolf King next door. Don't say that Lux and the others are not villains, they are already the ones who took away the protagonist's wife by force. The key is that she also said that Tina was voluntary. It's really funny.
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Official(4)Scraped 4d ago
Please change it to third person, it's very uncomfortable.
It's well written. Personal pronoun is not really a problem, I just don't feel comfortable with it.
Opolis, grab that section. It looks very unappetizing. The heart of the Holy Mother explodes, the key is that the Holy Mother is the Holy Mother. After it's over. In the scene where Aslan is hesitant, the protagonist becomes a ruthless soldier again. The characters in the context and context do not match each other, which is confusing.
It's awkward and not satisfying to watch.
I feel like, in my opinion, the protagonist of this novel should be Claire. Lux and the others have all become villains, but the problem is that the protagonist is not invincible, so he feels very uncomfortable and was caught and plotted against. He is really incomparable to the Wolf King next door. Don't say that Lux and the others are not villains, they are already the ones who took away the protagonist's wife by force. The key is that she also said that Tina was voluntary. It's really funny.
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Asking for leave has become your habit Just update a chapter and take a few days off.
