Fantasyland of Sea of ​​clouds

Although spring is late, it will eventually come. Although the cold wind is cold, it will eventually pass. People from far away, Don't be afraid to rush. The people of your motherland, Will definitely keep it in mind. The winner will eventually go down in history, The hero is about to be engraved in history. May the deceased rest in peace!

I'm here from a writer's assistant, stopping by to see you.

Also, you can divide the book into fewer paragraphs at the back according to your own habits, but it is better to divide it into more paragraphs at the front. The reader's first impression of the book is the first few chapters. If it feels very compact at the beginning, it will feel very uncomfortable. You can look at other books, and it is not difficult to find that they are usually one sentence and one paragraph, and a paragraph can be at most fifty words, so it will be more comfortable to read.

The writing is good, but the story is not very engaging. To catch the reader's attention at the beginning and make the whole plot interesting, you have to use your imagination. I read one or two chapters, and it may be that your story is very neat, not exaggerated enough, not full of strange colors, too ordinary, too common. You have to know that what you write is not a story that is close to reality. No matter how you write it, it cannot lack strange and grotesque things. Also, when you describe things like levels, you have to use pen and ink to write, but you can't write too much or too detailed. If it must be explained very clearly, you should choose a suitable place to insert it, otherwise it will make people feel boring (usually when an author writes this, I skip it). Then, your character's dialogue must not be too short or too cumbersome. It should be divided into segments when needed, so that what the character wants to express can be expressed more clearly. Finally, you can read more books written by famous writers (such as Lu Xun). You will find that the use of language is very important, concise and vividly expressing the emotions of the characters. The above are my suggestions.

Dear, if you are not satisfied with the plot, you can write to me for revision! ! !