The Fantasy Journey of the Void Mage

Hahaha, I saw a few pictures and said I couldn't stand it.

For example, if you say you are dismissive of ordinary people, you still have to explain to them, why you are dismissive, and why you should look at them pitifully, and look at this and that. Are you filling in the word count? A magician is a prince. I really can't see how he looks like a little prince. Even a pig will look like a royal after living in the royal family for a few years! Find a companion who will let you go. Throughout the book, you are either explaining or explaining why you want to explain it to ordinary people. A bunch of crap. Hey, you can't even tell the prince's appearance, he feels like a commoner.

Dear author, would you like to join us for some experience? It's so fun.

The protagonist is afraid that others will not know that he is from another world, and does not give up any opportunity to show off his advanced memory. He knows that he cannot let others know that he knows void magic and four-element magic, but he still pretends to be Shabi everywhere. It is extremely embarrassing and disgusting to watch. There are often inexplicable psychological associations and descriptions. The author wants to make the writing humorous and interesting, but the writing skills are not up to par, it is not interesting, and it is uncomfortable to read.

Author, I really appreciate your perseverance to write a million words, so I will write you a long review when I have time. Some words may be more direct, so please don't take offense. According to my estimation, you should be between sixteen and twenty years old. You may not be employed yet. You are influenced by Chinese fantasy novels and love the second dimension. To put it simply, you are an otaku. It seems that I have only read one chapter (in fact, I only have the patience to read one chapter) and I may not be qualified to evaluate your work, but judging from the text introducing the setting at the beginning, it is really average. To put it mildly, it may be mid-level. What to say next, I will give you some rational advice as if you are almost the same age. If you really love this work and want to continue writing it, I will support and approve it, because as an amateur writer, I understand that it usually takes an hour to write a thousand words. It is really hard to write so much. However, there are always buts at this time. If you want to write an outstanding work, it is recommended that you finish it immediately or revise it again, because you are talking about dispensable words from the beginning, which is very boring. The words should be concise, rather than trying to write a running account. Also, I suggest you not to have any hope of becoming famous. Regardless of your level, many talented writers are unknown because of lack of resources. Don't be disappointed. At least complete one work. Even if it is not perfect, you will be happy when you think back that the time spent coding is meaningful. Finally, I hope you will always be a lover of literature. (You can reply to me. After all, I wrote nearly half a chapter for you. There is another Ye Cangmang who is not as hard-working as you.)

Have you really seen Harry Potter? The second world, what are you writing about? The world of Harry Potter may not be said to be of a very high level, but it's not the lowest level, right? It functions to divide the soul (horcruxes) and store it (magic paintings have thoughts), as well as the immortality of ghosts for thousands of years, time converters, teleportation and space expansion (boxes) extension (infinite extension spell) spells, the standardization of weapons and wands... Time, space, and souls have all been studied. How could you write such rubbish? The protagonist has no humility to learn at all. Hogwarts was founded in the 10th century AD. It has been a thousand years since the school was founded. Dumbledore casually gave the time turner to Hermione for use, without worrying about the impact on the living world. And look at these curses, which can kill the soul, transfer space, repair the effects of curses, and randomly modify and forget the memory. Lockhart can use this garbage. There are also Grindelwald's prophecies, destiny, etc.

The front is fine, but the back is level eight, and I am invincible in other worlds. However, I am suspected by a few of the third and fourth levels, but I still whisper the truth. Can I be tougher? All kinds of water.

Nowadays, what I read in novels is the beginning. A good start is half the battle. The story is well designed and I can read it. The dialogue between characters needs to be strengthened. Sometimes the dialogue between characters looks strange. Especially after seeing the protagonist's powerful power, the inner reactions of those people and the narration seemed particularly discordant. There are also a lot of typos. Looking forward to the author's next novel.

Your loyalty is welcome. You will represent our Blessed Virgin Mary to the heavens and all the worlds.

I was just passing through the water experience. . . . . .