Fox Demon: Why Did I Become a Taoist Soldier?

In Chapter 5, I screamed and screamed at every turn. Every 35 sentences in Chew Chew Chew, this sentence comes up in one or two sentences, which makes people who watch it feel annoyed, you know? If you delete it, it would be better to make some modifications and not repeat too many words in one place. Something like this sounds and looks very uncomfortable.

Some characters in Fox Demon Matchmaker

It's enough to just practice swordsmanship. If you fix so many messes, won't it be useless?

First of all, there are two poisonous points, which made me feel very uncomfortable. First of all, the welfare gift package given by the protagonist system includes the three layers of reverse life, the thunder fruit, the famous sword command, the essence of the devil, the kaleidoscope of divine power, and the knight is not unarmed, and it also comes with the basic systems of 6 worlds. Coupled with the pure Yangyan and swordsmanship in the fox demon world, you can basically use whatever you want, without fully utilizing the effects of these skills. And it's really too complicated and confusing. Some of the unpopular ones have no effect at all. (Personally, I suggest that you first integrate the basic energy of the system to synthesize the protagonist's own path to immortality.) Secondly, I feel that the protagonist's positioning of himself is not very clear. He was obviously a direct descendant of the Dao Alliance who had been reincarnated for more than ten years, and it felt like a modern person's soul had passed through it. This is reflected in many places, such as using Demonic Sin to lose control. He was worried that innocent people would be killed in the city, so he went to Tushan. After this wave of operations, I can only say that the human brain will not become smarter due to time travel. It's not like there's no place in the wilderness for you to vent, but you just think that in Tu Shan's eyes, Wang Quan is no different from anyone else, right? With less than 10 cards at the beginning, the protagonist became a roadside bypassed by Tu Shan, and the 10 million tael of blackmail debt was readily accepted. When provoking Tushan Yaya, he deliberately got beaten without turning on elementalization. When communicating with Tushan, I just wanted to listen to advice, but I felt that I was putting myself too low. Of course, it's not that there aren't good things about it. For example, the settings of the original characters are very well described. There is also a sweet feeling of love in the daily life with Tushan Yaya.

It was a bit toxic to help Dongfang Yue Yue chase Hong Hong. When I started writing about Hong Hong, I thought the heroine was her. I didn't go into details later. It doesn't matter if the heroine is not Hong Hong. But you inserted a corner of Dongfang Yue's life experience and backhandedly helped Dongfang Yue chase Hong Hong. After her experience completely changed, Yue Hong no longer had the same feeling as in the original novel.

May I ask if this is a single heroine➕Update

Not bad, very imaginative, not bad, not bad

What's the point of all this mess? Just the first ten chapters💩?

It's not why the work can't be found

Come on, come on. It's very beautiful. Please update it soon.