Take a Look at This Vast Universe

I have read Chapter 20 and expressed my opinion. The plot is relatively scattered and there are too many main lines, which makes each plot relatively scattered. There is one awakening team in one university. The main line of the awakening team appears abruptly and has no foreshadowing, giving people the feeling that they don't know what to do. Then there is the characterization. The protagonist's character issues are quite conflicting. On the one hand, he is hard-working, but on the other hand, he is not careful in his work. The goal is to command the battleship, but his grandfather has no knowledge of battleships even though he is the commander. There is also the protagonist's goal, and he suddenly starts working hard without anything major happening. In the end, there was no transition in the change of identity. I suddenly graduated from college and became a member of the awakening team. My mentality was full and my mental journey was relatively fast. Finally, I would like to support the newbie. It is the first time I write a blueprint that can slowly show a new world without breaking down the logic. It is not easy to patiently portray the supporting characters. I hope to continue to work hard.

The characters are not prominent and the storyline is not compact. It's still a bit long-winded.

I'm a newbie, but I don't have enough writing, so I hope you can forgive me. Plot problem, the main line - the protagonist goes from being an ordinary awakened person - awakening team - mission and training improvement - to the current ability problem. First of all, I feel that there is too little main content and other plots are too cumbersome. Secondly, the character description makes it difficult for readers to feel involved. Maybe the writing is not enough and the plot is too bland. I don't feel the ups and downs, and some things appear a bit abrupt. Secondly, the interspersed branch lines do not have much effect. So far, it has not been shown that the branch lines play a connecting role in the article, and the transition is also a little far-fetched. Finally, I personally think that the content should be refined and redundant and wordy words should be eliminated; the sense of language should be enhanced to make it easier for readers to read; the plot logic should be strengthened and the protagonist should be rendered sideways to make the protagonist's existence more three-dimensional and more effective. Ps: As a newcomer, I can only work hard to bring the current writing to what I think is the best state. I will make certain modifications later. Every time I write 100,000 words, my ability will increase, so I will return to the previous chapters to make modifications when it is almost finished. Novels should be refined over and over again.

Five-star praise, come on, it's great