The Female Supporting Character Cultivates Immortality, and the Protagonist Worships Heaven

❤️Here are some suggestions for Queque: (It's a bit long, so I suggest you read it patiently) 💖1. If you want to write a story that touches people's hearts, try to pay attention to the details. Don't slap people in the face just for the sake of slaps in the face. Don't describe others' belittling too much. You can mainly write about the actions and effects of the heroine in detail (such as the heroine's agile figure, swinging a sword). The neatness, the vigorous body skills, the momentum of leaping forward) This part must be more evaluated than others, and the profile description is not only a kind of first suppressed and then improved by other people's comments, but also the heroine's vulnerability in fighting, the broken hair on her forehead that is wet with sweat, and other detailed appearance descriptions 💖2. The boundary of cultivation is not very clear. As a reader, you may not be able to remember clearly the cultivation of some characters in the article. This can be emphasized several times. 💖3. Still the same as 1, the plot concept is good, but the description of the heroine is a bit sparse. Since it is a heroine novel, other people's evaluation is essential, but it should not be too much. When slapping a face, you must not only look at the contrast, but also the positive description (the three major language and psychological environment descriptions). You cannot overshadow the heroine's fighting process with a few sentences. The result is important, but without the process, the article will easily become pale and dull. For example, some paragraphs can be written like this: [Her eyes suddenly stagnated, looking at the other person's hand that was secretly forming a seal, then she turned around neatly and walked around behind him with nimble steps. "Sa--", the shining sword suddenly unsheathed and swung at the opponent with great force. The white sword energy rushed towards him with a cold light. He was suddenly startled. He only managed to dodge the sword energy that was like the sickle of death. Cold sweat broke out from his back, and he speeded up the hand seal. Seeing that the opponent was dodging away, she once again turned over neatly, swung her sword and attacked the opponent's front. The sword was invisible, and everyone watching the battle was dazzled. They could only see the afterimage of the long sword, and the overflowing cold air reminded everyone all the time - just how advanced the swordsmanship of the female cultivators on the fighting platform was. There is still an undercurrent on the stage. The opponent's hand that hurriedly formed the seal finally stopped, and the magic was completed. The blue sky was obscured by raging thunderclouds, and the thick ink-like clouds secretly flashed with heart-stopping purple thunder, ready to go... The strong wind was blowing everywhere, violently shaking the towering trees around, the dark green leaves rustled, and there seemed to be waves of wailing from the trees. The surrounding air also became sultry and dense with water vapor, and everyone in the audience felt the smell of earth blowing in their faces - it was a precursor to the coming rainstorm. At this moment, the confrontation between the two people on the stage also affects the breathing and breathing of everyone in the audience...] (Sorry, I can only think of so much for writing this temporarily) All in all, the biggest problem with this article is that the description aspect is slightly higher than the main content. 💖4. Some of the opportunities given to the heroine have not been used. I don't know if they are still paving the way for the future, such as a pool of ice lotus and spiritual crystals (the number of trips abroad is not many, you can write more scenes where the heroine enters cultivation), and Su Fuyun's previous The heroine never told the ending of the spiritual beast she bought after she came out from the bottom of the cliff. Even if she died below, she still had to tell her about it. Also, the swordsmanship that the heroine obtained was a swordsmanship after all. She could also write about her sword-practicing movements, not a narrative! It doesn't just mean that she keeps practicing, there must be actions, understanding, and results. In other words, the author has laid too many foreshadowings before, but he forgot or had plans to write off-site. I prefer the latter. There are still many pitfalls in this article. It is a good start for this type of article. There will be a longer road ahead. I hope this comment can be seen and give the author some inspiration. 💖5. The plot can be a little more ups and downs. The article seems to be dissatisfied with the mountains. You can grasp the scale and torture the male and female protagonists appropriately, but the time should not be too long. It should be controlled within twenty chapters. Don't torture the readers to death. Well, that's about it. If there are still questions in the future, I will add more. I really like this article and I can see the author's progress. I wish Queque better and better ❤️ Hehe, I hope it will be useful to Queque, (although I don't know if I can see it)

If the author can tell me for sure whether the male protagonist is the one named Jiang, then I won't read it. If I keep reading, he will be the male protagonist in the end. What a waste of time. I really don't like the male protagonist, just my personal opinion.

The opening of the drama is so frustrating that it's easy to stop watching it. If there is no reversal later, it will be rubbish. Did the people in the book I read become mentally ill? It's like ancient Chinese again. The heroine's IQ is also a bit worrying. This setting is also wrong. They have said that his father has many good relationships, but the result is so aggrieved, as if he will die if he doesn't take those as his teachers. Are the good fortunes his father received just for shit? Moreover, what kind of master, who is really the first monk, can his B-phase Taoist heart be stable? The start didn't go well. If you tell me that it will be good if you see the back, who the hell has the intention to see the back.

This is the stupidest and most holy fairy tale heroine I have ever seen. She takes the initiative to save the monster who framed you. Moreover, the monster grins at you😓 After the monster is raised, it returns to the arms of the original heroine. Later, the original heroine abandoned the monster again, and the heroine went to pick up the monster that others did not want... I am a bit speechless.

Why doesn't the heroine find a better person to be her master? She knows that the master is not good and won't give her any help and will harm her. Why doesn't she even dare to refuse? What kind of immortality are you still cultivating?

How did the author write such a saintly female protagonist? It seems that the author is also a big saint. Why are you still charging? It should be free to watch!

The writing is okay and there is room for improvement. It's a pity that the author is wrapped in the cerebellum. The upper limit is not high and the thinking is not progressive. How can he write a good work? The author is a woman but has deep patriarchal thoughts. This outdated feudal thought is revealed from time to time in the lines of a certain paragraph. It makes people sick, just like a fly mixed in the meal, which makes people unprepared. When you find the fly wings in the early stage, you can pick them out and continue to eat. In the later stage, you see more and more fly stumps. When I expected that I would see the body of the fly when I ate further, I could only throw away the bowl of rice and curse it as disgusting. If the author really regards the protagonist as his daughter, how can he get reproductive cancer and have to breed her? Is she a daughter, a pet, a dog, or a tool in the author's mind? I think it is very clear. Although this is a cool article, isn't it sad to treat the characters in the novel as a money-making tool to satisfy some fantasy? The author should at least be responsible for the character's independent personality, right? If you want to write a great heroine, write it carefully, let the heroine be self-reliant, and walk her own path step by step, instead of letting the heroine walk through most of the book and still be attached to a man in the end, turning her into a love brain, destroying the girl's character, trampling on the girl's thoughts and personality, insulting the heroine and readers at the same time with your male-centered thoughts, and calling it love. If the author has been tortured deeply by men and feels that he cannot change his Qing Dynasty thinking, then I suggest you, the author, stop writing about female protagonists. It would be better to write about men having a harem and being open and honest as a Qing Dynasty person.

Two words, disgusting 1. Since you knew before becoming a teacher that the person you were worshiping was not a good teacher, why did you insist on worshiping her? Not to mention that she was alone and had nothing to rely on and could only obey orders. Who would believe this? Just because her parents are Nascent Souls. Who would believe that she had no other choice? 2. Since I know that the senior sister will grab supplies and the master will help the senior sister, why do you still let things happen instead of taking precautions in advance? All kinds of things feel like they are happening forcibly. For example, why is the master so good to the senior sister and why are others so? I couldn't stand it anymore, so I decided to give up.

Seeing the opportunity, she only wanted one ice lotus, and she didn't want to take it from the martial arts tree. If someone wanted to give it to her for inheritance, she would refuse it, and even made a poisonous oath to herself. Everyone wanted it, but she didn't have any ideas. It was too fake, even a saint could not do it. I guess I can't take too many spiritual stones, otherwise I'll feel really bad...

It's uncomfortable to abuse the heroine, and it's good to upgrade steadily, but after all the mistakes have been made, it's not as good as the mindless Mary Suwen. The original heroine's perspective may be a little more enjoyable than the heroine's.