A Little Extra from under the Brocade Clothes
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This book comes from a follow-up self-written extra of "Under the Brocade". If you are not satisfied with anything, please give me some suggestions. Thank you! ! !
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The number of book friends is exactly 100, congratulations to my sister!
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Damn, I think the plot of your work is quite good, but the biggest problem is the dialogue between the characters. In addition to having no titles, the character dialogues are also divided into too many paragraphs. Some dialogues can be divided into one paragraph, otherwise it will appear too much and too confusing. Secondly, a single character speaks a little less, which means that the dialogue is relatively long, but the content of the dialogue is relatively short. For example, the indifferent Lu Yi sometimes speaks perfunctorily and answers with just one word, which is not very effective. Okay, my suggestion is to modify the character dialogue. I don't like this very much, but I like this work very much. I hope you don't get me wrong. I want to make the work I like more perfect. [Emot=default,01/]
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One minute the young lady has reached one hundred chapters! Wow, that's great, congratulations!
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Official(19)Scraped 23d ago
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Pairs come again Seeking the essence... The essence... The essence... Essence... Essence... Essence...
Check in and post some more pictures by the way, they are in pairs!
Check in, send some pictures by the way, just a little bit...
I'm here to increase my presence, haha... Brush Flush Brush existence Create a sense of presence ...
To the author 2
Damn, I captured a piece of data at a critical moment and posted the picture👇 Book Friends of My Works VS Book Friends of Your Works It's not a competition, it's this relationship. It's so big... Please take a look. Mine is not very auspicious, but yours is quite auspicious. But what a coincidence, your book friends happen to be twice as many as mine. The above is given to the big ones, others can come and join in the fun, hehe😁😁
The number of book friends is exactly 100, congratulations to my sister!
Check in, check in!
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Damn, I think the plot of your work is quite good, but the biggest problem is the dialogue between the characters. In addition to having no titles, the character dialogues are also divided into too many paragraphs. Some dialogues can be divided into one paragraph, otherwise it will appear too much and too confusing. Secondly, a single character speaks a little less, which means that the dialogue is relatively long, but the content of the dialogue is relatively short. For example, the indifferent Lu Yi sometimes speaks perfunctorily and answers with just one word, which is not very effective. Okay, my suggestion is to modify the character dialogue. I don't like this very much, but I like this work very much. I hope you don't get me wrong. I want to make the work I like more perfect. [Emot=default,01/]
Check in
Ahem... I see that the book circle is quite deserted, so let me make up some numbers. Plus, I have 6 book reviews, which is quite auspicious! Check in, check in, check in, check in...
Congratulations
One minute the young lady has reached one hundred chapters! Wow, that's great, congratulations!
