Hp Forever

[However, I have only read a few chapters. There will definitely be improvements in the future. I am just giving my opinions on the first few chapters! ! Because it's really, um, um, not a strong sense of immersion.] To be honest, I'm a little disappointed, but don't be angry. I just want to make a few comments: [No malice, no malice, no malice! I just can't help it o(╥╥)o (below is the question) 1 There are a lot of typos. 2 There are many bad sentences. 3The plot is a bit confusing. 4 The character's personality is not very obvious The above is what I have seen from the previous chapters. (Here's how I think it can be improved) 1The typos can be ignored, after all, they are not important. 2. It is mainly about the use of punctuation marks and word order. This correction is very simple. When reading other novels, you can pay attention to how others use it and just apply it. Regarding the transfer of picture sense and plot points, you can pay attention to it when reading novels written by other masters. For example, when people are having a conversation: (I really can't stand it, I can't stand it, it's so awkward when I watch it) The heroine said: "Bala, bala." Or the heroine said: "Abba, Abba." Or the heroine said: "Abba, Abba." The heroine is angry/happy/joyful, etc. (Says): "Abba, Abba." The heroine said: "Bala, bala," the heroine turned around/paused/smiled, etc., "Abba, Abba." "Bara Bala." The heroine. 3. The plot is confusing, mainly due to the lack of visual sense and no sense of spatial transformation. You can write a detailed outline, like a historical time axis, string it down in one line, and write everything down from left to right. Of course, you can also write a detailed outline in the usual way. (Actually, I'm not good at writing detailed outlines because it's too troublesome, but I have to say, it's really useful) 4. There is not much to say about the character. You can read more interviews with Aunt Rowling, the original movie, etc. You can also read readers' analysis, character biographies, etc. In the end, the characters were a bit confusing... (It's over, I've said a bit too much. Don't be sad. After all, when I wrote this book, I had already surpassed many people!!

Here's a question for everyone: Have you finished your homework? PS: Hahahaha, I don't need to write it.

He whispered that I registered it under the name of the heroine, hahahaha.

I am so grateful to several readers who read my Zezha novels carefully every time and give me feedback every time. Thank you, love you❤️. (˵¯͒¯͒˵)(♡▽♡) I will read your comments actively and seriously~ Let's make progress together~

About the deletion of GGAD extras In order not to affect the reading experience, I have temporarily deleted it, because if I don't delete it, you won't be able to see it when I post new chapters.

A few days ago, I was diagnosed with lymph node metastasis from thyroid cancer. I hurriedly went to see a doctor. I had surgery last week and was discharged from the hospital today. Everyone must maintain a good mood and not be affected by work or life, especially others, and fall into a state of internal friction. Life is a wilderness, so don't stick to the rules and leave people and things you don't like. If your life is affected and you still endure it for a little salary, then the gain outweighs the loss.

Unknown valley... Si Xun was pounding bean paste in the big pot, while Snape on the side was holding the recipe and studying the ingredients carefully. Genevieve pulled out a small piece of ice skin and handed it to Sirius so that he could play with it while Fred and George were tied to chairs by Charles to prevent them from adding toppings to the mooncake. After Molly failed to use the magic spell to make mooncakes, she began to study egg yolk cakes, and soon a row of fried salted egg yolks appeared on the table. Arthur looked carefully at the Muggle oven instructions with his glasses on, and then touched the heated base with his bare hands. Harry calmly brought the burn ointment to his father-in-law, and Hermione handed her gloves to Ron and asked him to take out the baked egg yolk pastry. In the photo, Grindelwald looked at the plates of desserts and fruits placed in front of him and Albus, with an expression that looked like he was looking at an idiot. Albus was curious to discuss Chinese sacrificial rules with Cheng Haiying.

In order not to affect the reading experience, I have temporarily deleted it, because if I don't delete it, you won't be able to see it when I post new chapters.

If you find any seniors written in the article, it is my mistake, so beat me hard and make me change it. I will change it when I find out. I love you, good night.

I wish you good luck in your postgraduate entrance examination and will update soon😘😘😘