Kitty, You Are so Sweet

Just because I looked at you a few more times in the crowd, you left a beautiful moment in my youth. 💫💫 (Come on the code, your writing is great👍)

This must be my first time writing a novel online, and it's already very good to be able to write it like this. However, I also have a few shortcomings that I would like to "admonish". First, since the novel is written in the third person, it is necessary to grasp the advantage of the third person and describe each person's psychological activities in more detail. For example🌰, when the male and female protagonists met in the IELTS tutoring class, a lot of emphasis was placed on describing the female protagonist's psychology and the female protagonist's affection for the male protagonist, but there was no description of the male protagonist's other appearance, movements, expressions, etc., Which made the male protagonist's affection for the female protagonist seem abrupt. Correspondingly, the psychology of the heroine is very richly described, which makes the readers have a sense of involvement and the sour feeling of first love. In the same way, the all-round description of the heroine's best friend could also be deepened. Second, there are good and bad uses of emojis. Good emojis will make it easier for readers to understand the mood of the tasks in the book, but emojis also have some disadvantages. To give another example🌰, when the heroine is in class, studying in the evening, or talking with her best friends, excessive use of emojis is suspected of filling the number of words hahaha. Not only will it not enrich the character image, but it will also hinder the reader's reading fluency when the text is broken, and it will not be able to retain the reader(s) who are trying to read. This extends to a typesetting problem. I don't know if you have seen other famous writers on the Internet or in physical books. Every author leaves free space between natural paragraphs. Because readers will feel tired after reading for a long time, blindly piling up words will be in vain. On other websites such as jj, readers are even given the option to adjust the spare settings. It can be seen that although the layout problem is small, it is also the key to retaining readers. Third, the typos and white characters are not caught clearly, the spoken words are more serious, and the punctuation marks are omitted and wrongly written. Another example🌰The heroine complained to her classmates during evening self-study that it was too noisy and said: "It's so noisy." Words like this cannot be used as written language in compositions or novels. It is recommended to change it to: "It's too noisy. It's almost impossible to study." Then the dialogue between her best friend and classmate and the heroine can enrich the character image a lot. Enriching the character image does not rely on the accumulation of words. "She is lively and cute" and "gentle and kind" will only make people think it is a primary school student's composition. The richness of the tasks depends on various descriptions to portray and highlight it. I believe that reading comprehension is also done in daily life. Hahahahahahahaha. Fourth, the character creation is not rich enough, the environment description is too cliché, and the character design has no new ideas. To put it bluntly, after reading all the existing updates, I still can't remember the names of the male and female protagonists. I won't give examples, there are examples like this throughout the text. In fact, most of these problems are common problems for new writers. As long as you pay more attention during the coding process and use what you usually write or learn from others, they can be easily overcome. There is a difference between telling a story and telling a story well. Since you choose to use this method to express your inner emotions, it must be because you feel unhappy if you don't express your feelings, so you should manage it more carefully. In fact, I think great defeats are also new, and successes are also new. It is because I am a newbie that I can write and update with passion, which gives the words the feeling of sour first love. As long as you learn from each other's strong points and make up for your shortcomings, you will definitely achieve the results you have in mind. This is a 1,100-word long review for you. It's just my humble opinion. It's for reference only. If you don't like it, don't criticize it. Just take it as wishing you a happy opening of a new book. You know who I am, right?

Although the book is still small, you can see that it is well written and well thought out. I hope I can catch the bug after I finish writing it.