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The heroine is really cheap. Speechless

I feel so sorry for Zhou Ye... Come on, author! Don't give up! ! ! ! When I have money, I will support you! !

An anticlimax, superfluous

What is the most distressing thing for girls is to admit that they are promiscuous, coquettish and shameless in front of the boy they love the most. What worries boys the most is when the woman they love most admits that they are promiscuous, coquettish, and shameless in front of them. Pianpian is in this book. He is not abusing the female protagonist, nor is he abusing the male protagonist. He is abusing me. Woo woo woo, my heart hurts so much~

The ending is incomplete

Come on! ! ! I like it very much. When I have money, I will support you!

Ah... I feel sorry for Zhou Ye...

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It took a lot of effort to see the ending, but it turns out that the ending does not punish the person who hurt the male and female protagonists the most, which is a bit perfunctory.

I think it's okay. The plot is a bit fast but smooth, but a big problem is that the details are not handled well, such as the characterization of some scenes and the necessity of plot logic. For example, in the chapter where the heroine learns that her sister beat Li Xu to death, I was thinking about why those people didn't call the police. Is it really necessary to depict them in the mood to quarrel at this time? The rationality of logic, such as Li Xu's father asking for help. The heroine forgave Li Xu for beating her and forced her to drink and apologize. It's not like the Li family couldn't offend the heroine. Why did it go to this point? It felt a bit deliberate. Similarly, the character of the hero's sister appeared once, which was really unnecessary. There was also no ending for the hero's younger brother Tang Lin. There was no relevant positive description. He only wrote one sentence asking Ji Ze to send him abroad. But the author should explain whether he can do this or not, and the relationship between the hero and heroine. The development is very well written, and it is a very classic "I love you but I can't say it" kind of sadomasochistic feeling, so it gives me a rough feeling that the whole text has only the skeleton without flesh and blood (that is, details), but there is a feeling of fast pace in it, which may also be in line with the characteristics of the current fast food era, right????, I suggest that the author can try to add some environmental descriptions to make the article settle down. A little, or the psychological description of other characters. For example, in the chapter where the big wife buys shares, although it is reflected in the dialogue between the male protagonist and his brother later, it still feels like there is something missing. Generally speaking, the plot development is in place. The writing needs to be strengthened, but it is also very good. It is really difficult to find a good-looking novel now, but every author who creates with heart deserves to be encouraged, come on!