
The Rules of Survival in Hell Mode Through the Book
About This Novel
Jian Yu, a fast-traveling worker, and System No. 81, Who had failed many missions, chose the hell mode mission in order to survive. Along the way, they were not only tortured, but also violently knocked against the male and female protagonists of the original book, and admired the cute and well-behaved female goose female lead. The little puppy who has always supported her feels very extraordinary, and finally developed into a partner? ? ?
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Official(4)Scraped 7d ago
Polite advice, don't spray if you don't like it!
First of all, I hope you can maintain your original intention. It seems that you really want to write online. I hope you can persevere no matter what setbacks you face. Secondly, I would like to give you some suggestions. I feel like the big questions are almost all dialogues. You can add some description of external objects appropriately, such as the protagonist's expressions and movements when speaking, and the weather conditions at the time. (I haven't read much, but I can't help but want to give some suggestions. If you don't like it, you can delete it.)
Yesterday's internship assessment cost half my life
Must update today! ! !
She just needs to be a young boy with a clear breeze and bright moon, not to be restrained by the world, not to be troubled by shackles and loneliness.
Dad, why don't we change the cover. The content of the article is very good, but changing it to a good-looking one will be more attractive. Most people read the title and cover of the novel first, then read the introduction, and finally read the content of the novel. For the future development of the novel, it's best to change it (don't like to lightly spray (˘•ω•˘), and finally pay attention to your health!) Put some good-looking pictures, hehe⁄(⁄ ⁄•⁄ω⁄•⁄ ⁄)⁄, (But in my imagination, Jian Yu should be very similar to the second picture) Personal opinion (๑‾ ꇴ ‾๑)
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Official(4)Scraped 7d ago
Polite advice, don't spray if you don't like it!
First of all, I hope you can maintain your original intention. It seems that you really want to write online. I hope you can persevere no matter what setbacks you face. Secondly, I would like to give you some suggestions. I feel like the big questions are almost all dialogues. You can add some description of external objects appropriately, such as the protagonist's expressions and movements when speaking, and the weather conditions at the time. (I haven't read much, but I can't help but want to give some suggestions. If you don't like it, you can delete it.)
Yesterday's internship assessment cost half my life
Must update today! ! !
She just needs to be a young boy with a clear breeze and bright moon, not to be restrained by the world, not to be troubled by shackles and loneliness.
Dad, why don't we change the cover. The content of the article is very good, but changing it to a good-looking one will be more attractive. Most people read the title and cover of the novel first, then read the introduction, and finally read the content of the novel. For the future development of the novel, it's best to change it (don't like to lightly spray (˘•ω•˘), and finally pay attention to your health!) Put some good-looking pictures, hehe⁄(⁄ ⁄•⁄ω⁄•⁄ ⁄)⁄, (But in my imagination, Jian Yu should be very similar to the second picture) Personal opinion (๑‾ ꇴ ‾๑)












