Douluo: Commission a Shop, Start by Playing Sam
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(Peerless Tang Sect fan fiction) [After Chapter 70, the Star Dome Railway will be the main description] Yu Wuyi, a middle school boy from Blue Star, was flown to Douluo Continent by a super truck in order to save people. He received a commission system and needed to play a random character drawn to complete the commission. And the character that Yu Wuyi drew at the beginning was actually Sam from the beautiful girl x mecha combination! Hiss! Is this just the beginning of reaching the pinnacle of life? "I have three rules in my little shop." "First, we will not accept commissions that are trivial, assassinate innocent people, or provide insufficient compensation." "Second, the store only conducts its own business and does not participate in any power disputes." "Third, the right to interpret the above belongs to the shop owner." What? You said you didn't come here for the commission, but for the venue? Oh~ Shen Che stepped back to the background with a smile, and was replaced by a white mecha that was more than two meters high! "Just leave, no one will get hurt!" "Otherwise, you will all die!"
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Official(31)Scraped 17d ago
Some personal suggestions The protagonist must treat everyone equally, whether dealing with humans or spirit beasts. Once their positions are different, the incomprehensible character will disappear. For example, the act of rescuing people in the Star Forest is a bit confusing. Humans hunt soul beasts, and soul beasts also kill people. It is a natural selection of survival of the fittest, but you end up helping others. Are you still in the business of soul beasts? Your position has been distorted since the beginning. Could it be that you still want to set up a stall at the entrance of the great forest, specifically to help people hunt soul beasts? There is also the problem of helping Jiubao get the fairy grass, which is a bit too licking. Conditions are conditions. I was given a choice of two, whether I wanted to do it or not. But people said that the grass jelly was for Ning Tian, so he immediately became a licking dog, and the conditions were changed. You are too low-level, giving people the impression that they are easy to talk to and can just fool around and have fun. As long as others are smarter, the protagonist is just a thug who is always on call. In general, you are talking about what is particularly awesome about the protagonist's Master House, but the protagonist's behavior keeps causing trouble, which makes it seem very lousy. I hope the author will consider it carefully and the subsequent plot can establish the setting of the Master House and the protagonist. Come on!
My feeling is that the author wanted to yyyyyyyyyate the character of Iron Girl, but the world view is too big and can only be yyyy with the Douluo world view. I will not comment on the quality of the plot. If I raise my opinion, it will definitely be refuted. I might as well not mention it. I can only say that the subject matter is good, but the starting point is problematic.
Author, are you sure this is all Sam does? Didn't it show up? You must know that Sam is made by an interstellar empire that fights the insect swarms head-on. It is a wide-area annihilation type. It is specially designed to fight the insect swarms. The insect swarms are very scary. They reproduce quickly and have powerful power. If they only had the strength of this level of Titled Douluo or Douluo God, that empire would have been destroyed long ago.
It's so fucking disgusting. I suggest you start a new book. I'm sure it will be good if you write about the trashy Madonna being a dog.
Playing the role of Liuying, he said that he had an entropy attack and then passed out for a month? No, brother! Is this thing a fainting attack? From the text, it seems that the existence disappeared, and then he couldn't turn around in Shrek. He killed a 20,000-year-old soul beast and was beaten by the Red King? ? ? The upper echelons of spirit beasts don't care about this, unless you want to kill auspicious beasts, and Dou Si seems to have said that the Dark Demon Evil God Tiger (I regard the Dark Demon Evil Tiger you wrote as the predecessor of this) does not want to see human spirit beasts. Then when he went back and was beaten by Tang San, he told a joke that Liu Ying's 20% strength could not defeat a few extreme Douluo. The protagonist who had the strength to tell a joke was afraid that part of Tang San's spiritual body would come to him. All in all, I could watch it but it was very frustrating, so I just pretended to be in front of Ning Tian and then got frustrated in various ways (I only saw that the protagonist had to shield Tang San from prying eyes). You can use the character when commissioning, and you can also use the character to bear the negative effects of the character (such as anentropy, I guess Huangquan will also bear the influence of nothingness), but you also added a reduction in combat power and reduced it so much. How can you do this? You are afraid of a group of titled Douluo attacks, and you are afraid of Tang San's prying eyes. To be honest, you don't need these restrictions. If there is only one, I won't say anything, just stack three together and click. From my personal point of view, you are right, but I don't accept it.
The author writes very well, but it's a pity that the main character is a man.
Here is what the author says
Dear readers, if you have any comments or typos, you can point them out in the comments. But if there are comments that are too offensive, please forgive me and delete them. After all, we don't write books just to get angry. As long as your opinions are reasonable and reasonable, we will definitely find ways to change them. On the other hand, if you don't like it, you can put down this book and find something more suitable for you. There is no need to make such particularly negative remarks.
Okay, okay, update quickly, huge update, update
I think it is very good-looking. If I can continue writing, I will definitely keep reading.
The word count is too few, but the content is okay
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Official(31)Scraped 17d ago
Some personal suggestions The protagonist must treat everyone equally, whether dealing with humans or spirit beasts. Once their positions are different, the incomprehensible character will disappear. For example, the act of rescuing people in the Star Forest is a bit confusing. Humans hunt soul beasts, and soul beasts also kill people. It is a natural selection of survival of the fittest, but you end up helping others. Are you still in the business of soul beasts? Your position has been distorted since the beginning. Could it be that you still want to set up a stall at the entrance of the great forest, specifically to help people hunt soul beasts? There is also the problem of helping Jiubao get the fairy grass, which is a bit too licking. Conditions are conditions. I was given a choice of two, whether I wanted to do it or not. But people said that the grass jelly was for Ning Tian, so he immediately became a licking dog, and the conditions were changed. You are too low-level, giving people the impression that they are easy to talk to and can just fool around and have fun. As long as others are smarter, the protagonist is just a thug who is always on call. In general, you are talking about what is particularly awesome about the protagonist's Master House, but the protagonist's behavior keeps causing trouble, which makes it seem very lousy. I hope the author will consider it carefully and the subsequent plot can establish the setting of the Master House and the protagonist. Come on!
My feeling is that the author wanted to yyyyyyyyyate the character of Iron Girl, but the world view is too big and can only be yyyy with the Douluo world view. I will not comment on the quality of the plot. If I raise my opinion, it will definitely be refuted. I might as well not mention it. I can only say that the subject matter is good, but the starting point is problematic.
Author, are you sure this is all Sam does? Didn't it show up? You must know that Sam is made by an interstellar empire that fights the insect swarms head-on. It is a wide-area annihilation type. It is specially designed to fight the insect swarms. The insect swarms are very scary. They reproduce quickly and have powerful power. If they only had the strength of this level of Titled Douluo or Douluo God, that empire would have been destroyed long ago.
It's so fucking disgusting. I suggest you start a new book. I'm sure it will be good if you write about the trashy Madonna being a dog.
Playing the role of Liuying, he said that he had an entropy attack and then passed out for a month? No, brother! Is this thing a fainting attack? From the text, it seems that the existence disappeared, and then he couldn't turn around in Shrek. He killed a 20,000-year-old soul beast and was beaten by the Red King? ? ? The upper echelons of spirit beasts don't care about this, unless you want to kill auspicious beasts, and Dou Si seems to have said that the Dark Demon Evil God Tiger (I regard the Dark Demon Evil Tiger you wrote as the predecessor of this) does not want to see human spirit beasts. Then when he went back and was beaten by Tang San, he told a joke that Liu Ying's 20% strength could not defeat a few extreme Douluo. The protagonist who had the strength to tell a joke was afraid that part of Tang San's spiritual body would come to him. All in all, I could watch it but it was very frustrating, so I just pretended to be in front of Ning Tian and then got frustrated in various ways (I only saw that the protagonist had to shield Tang San from prying eyes). You can use the character when commissioning, and you can also use the character to bear the negative effects of the character (such as anentropy, I guess Huangquan will also bear the influence of nothingness), but you also added a reduction in combat power and reduced it so much. How can you do this? You are afraid of a group of titled Douluo attacks, and you are afraid of Tang San's prying eyes. To be honest, you don't need these restrictions. If there is only one, I won't say anything, just stack three together and click. From my personal point of view, you are right, but I don't accept it.
The author writes very well, but it's a pity that the main character is a man.
Here is what the author says
Dear readers, if you have any comments or typos, you can point them out in the comments. But if there are comments that are too offensive, please forgive me and delete them. After all, we don't write books just to get angry. As long as your opinions are reasonable and reasonable, we will definitely find ways to change them. On the other hand, if you don't like it, you can put down this book and find something more suitable for you. There is no need to make such particularly negative remarks.
Okay, okay, update quickly, huge update, update
I think it is very good-looking. If I can continue writing, I will definitely keep reading.
The word count is too few, but the content is okay
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