The Beginning of the Battle

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I personally feel that this book, if I were asked to rate it, would definitely rate it at 4. And the main feeling is that the outline and so on, I still can't read it very clearly. As for the writing style, I feel pretty good. Then there is a personal suggestion. If the author wants to write infinite, I feel that it should be faster and the speed is better. There is another point. It's about when the protagonist will hand over the book for the first time. This is a bit slow now. You know, it's a bit uncomfortable. The pace is slow now. I personally prefer a faster pace. If you plan to only write about this world, then you can just pretend that I didn't say anything. The above are my own thoughts. If you don't like it, don't criticize it. That's it.

I feel that the power system in this book is very complicated. Since it comes from the ninja world, why doesn't it use ninjutsu (yin seals are considered secret techniques, right)? Then there is the setting of JOJO, which is both ripple and a substitute, and then the spiritual equipment is actually the six-path mode? Why didn't the author add some of One Piece's three-color Haki and Fate's Noble Phantasm? Or you can have a soul-cutting sword, a sky-locking zangetsu, or a mirror flower and water moon. Since the protagonist has no system, why does it feel like he knows everything? Then there is the world, I feel that he is very embarrassed, his wife was snatched away, even if Kuangsan may be here, he is still disliked by the protagonist of Secret Justice, the whole character is awkward, Yin seal, you have accumulated so many years and only have more than 50 spiritual power, you don't know what the protagonist is, the substitute Platinum Star, Zawalu has many feelings With the presence of Kurumi, I don't feel strong at all. I feel that the current protagonist's expressiveness is really weak, and his expressiveness is not as strong as Tohka's after the inversion. Then a group of people were shocked. If the power setting is too many, it becomes a hodgepodge. Naruto has so many amazing ninjutsu, but you can only find the Yin seal? There are so many awesome plug-ins in Naruto, but you can only find the Six Paths mode? Kaleidoscope, Samsara Eye, Earth Explosion Sky Star, Shinra Tianzheng, Kamui, Amaterasu, Sky Obstruction Star, Wheel Tomb Border Prison, isn't it delicious? As for the stand-in, wouldn't Gold Experience Requiem work? It's pretty cool for a stand to hit a normal person, but even if your destructive power reaches S, I still feel it's not as good as Tohka's one-shot sword, not to mention the range setting. In short, the protagonist can obviously be very cool, but the author insists on writing it like Wuhe Shidao with the Tyrant Lord. There are too many flaws. Can the author write the protagonist according to one or two power settings? Obviously Ninjutsu is very strong, but I have to use a substitute. If the protagonist has a system or time travel, I can understand it. I hope the author is not writing for the goal of a hodgepodge. If you make the spiritual equipment completely Susanoo, it sounds better than the Six Paths mode (in terms of destructive power and expressiveness, I am not saying it is better than the Ten-Tails assist mode NB)

Today I have a book that came back alive from lockdown! Can your demon come back?

Nothing to say, this is a rubbish book. It is suitable for beginners. Don't even think about it for old bookworms. Reading it will ruin your three views.

To be honest, books like novels about same characters are mostly read by otakus. Of course, I am the same. My advice to the author is: change the protagonist's way of speaking. Don't be direct and say something. It seems a bit rude, but at the same time, it is casual. It seems very contradictory to say it verbally and then say politeness at the end of the conversation. Of course, the character of the protagonist has no characteristics or personality like many other people. I hope to change it a little, such as: three noes or having an affix in each sentence, so that others can have a deeper impression. What most readers think As mentioned earlier, most of the people who read doujins are otakus, who like to see what their so-called wives look like in their second creations, and they also like to see the protagonists having a harem. Because the title of the book is a harem anime, it attracts most readers. I personally like the setting of the protagonist's abilities. It is very interesting to add materials from other anime. Let's return to otakus: Everyone likes their "wife" and doesn't want to be hurt, and I am the same, because I am very angry when I see my favorite character being hurt, and if it is serious, some people may report this book! For example, in the scene between the protagonist and Yuya Miku, people who like her will definitely not be convinced when they see her being hurt. Of course, the protagonist is not forced to change the character of a good person. This character is very disgusting. I believe most people hate it. The scene where the protagonist fights Yuya Miku also made me feel disgusted with that Miku. She deserves to be beaten. She fights innocent people for no reason. If the protagonist changes his view of the protagonist, it will be very wonderful in the later stage. Who doesn't want to see the protagonist collect a harem? (Of course there are some people) For the fan you are dating, if you don't change it, you won't be able to accept the harem, unless you change the world for him, and also change Itsuka Shido (who hates this melon skin so much). I don't know how the author wants to write it? Itsuka Shido (let's call him Guapi) sealed the elves, firstly because he felt so pitiful, and secondly because he wanted to collect energy (Guapi himself didn't know) I would mind if the author reads the manga about the fight. It would be completely difficult to write about just watching the anime unless the fourth season comes out. Summary Change the way the protagonist speaks, and add a few or one personality or characteristics. Most people want to have a harem, and the relationship between the characters in the plot is a bit confusing. A must read for the author! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Why should we emphasize the harem? This is an original protagonist, a new character, and the entire book is written around the protagonist. The title is already written. The Fight is an old movie. Everyone knows the characters. The main reason is that everyone comes to see the interaction between the female characters and the protagonist in the Fight, not the protagonist. Who knows about an original character? Of course, if the author wants to write about time travel in the future, he must bring the harem with him, because there is a melon in that world! (‡▼Benefit▼) Don't create other characters, otherwise it will be weird Anyway, that's all my suggestions. I hope the author will change them. There may be typos in it, don't mind it ┗(＾0＾)┓

When I read novels about two-dimensional time travel, I always read them for fun and seldom read them seriously. However, the author's last novel, (The Demon Comes to the Second Dimension), is indeed very good. It really made me calm down and read this kind of time-travel style novel. The author's writing style is also very good. It is much better than most novels that only write about brainless and invincible flow. The style of the protagonist Rie really made my eyes shine. , The characters are as they should be in terms of character design and personality. They are very full-bodied and vividly drawn. It is definitely a novel character that left a deep impression on me. Looking forward to the day when Rie returns.

This story is very bad, and the ending is disgusting. This kind of ending is very free and easy, right? But the feelings of the characters in the play have never been considered, and you are not worthy of writing a fanfic.

The more I watch, the less I can stand it. The protagonist feels so sick.

Cultivating immortality, cultivating immortality, cultivating immortality, cultivating immortality, cultivating immortality, cultivating immortality - the poster has exhausted all his energy, die!