Kunming's Past
by Lao Pu
About This Novel
I have lived in Kunming for a while, and I love this city and everyone in it, even though some of them only stay for a short time like me. Maybe this is an ordinary life.
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Official(3)Scraped 9d ago
simple works
Many metaphorical descriptions are used in the work, which makes many boring plots more vivid and interesting, and looks very picturesque. The shortcoming is that the paragraphs are unreasonable. There are always long paragraphs, resulting in several paragraph centers in each paragraph. It is easy for readers to not distinguish the central content of the paragraph, so it is recommended to pay attention to reasonable paragraphing. Of course, some people say that for the convenience of reading, online articles are even written one sentence at a time. I think it is even more unreasonable and undesirable. One sentence at a time will lead to poor coherence in the article. The introduction of the work should briefly introduce the general context of the book. At present, the main line of the work cannot be seen from the text. It seems that the work is recording what is seen, heard, and trivial matters while traveling, and has been watching the entire society with a cold eye. Of course, it may also be that the author has been foreshadowing the past. Only if you have the patience to follow it can you appreciate the wonderful content.
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Your work is very well written, and my book also takes Spring City as the background city.
The language is well organized
The language is quite fluently organized, the scene descriptions are quite accurate, and the characters are very distinctive. Being able to pay attention to the reasonable segmentation will definitely add a lot of color.
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Official(3)Scraped 9d ago
simple works
Many metaphorical descriptions are used in the work, which makes many boring plots more vivid and interesting, and looks very picturesque. The shortcoming is that the paragraphs are unreasonable. There are always long paragraphs, resulting in several paragraph centers in each paragraph. It is easy for readers to not distinguish the central content of the paragraph, so it is recommended to pay attention to reasonable paragraphing. Of course, some people say that for the convenience of reading, online articles are even written one sentence at a time. I think it is even more unreasonable and undesirable. One sentence at a time will lead to poor coherence in the article. The introduction of the work should briefly introduce the general context of the book. At present, the main line of the work cannot be seen from the text. It seems that the work is recording what is seen, heard, and trivial matters while traveling, and has been watching the entire society with a cold eye. Of course, it may also be that the author has been foreshadowing the past. Only if you have the patience to follow it can you appreciate the wonderful content.
Come on update
Your work is very well written, and my book also takes Spring City as the background city.
The language is well organized
The language is quite fluently organized, the scene descriptions are quite accurate, and the characters are very distinctive. Being able to pay attention to the reasonable segmentation will definitely add a lot of color.
