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The male protagonist has traveled through time, and so has the female protagonist. The male protagonist may have recognized the female protagonist and then saved her. Then he made an excuse. He must like the female protagonist. The female protagonist thinks they are mortal enemies, so he helps the female protagonist and looks for her alone. The heroine is also Zhu Zhu. She might have been the real heroine in her previous life, but she was deprived of her luck by the time-traveling girl. Now that the heroine is back in this life, everything is back on track. Why can the reborn girl inherit the Shennong space later? , The reason can only be Father Jiang. Father Jiang has the blood of Shennong, because it is an heirloom left by the Jiang family. In medicine, there are some reasons that will affect the blood type. Anyway, it is not a good way. The time-traveling girl has no memory of the book. From the fact that she just feels like bleeding to identify the master's jade pendant, it can be seen that why she has a crush on Father Jiang. Could it be Yan Gou? There is no space for the time-traveling girl in this life, and Green Tea Mom is seducing her. As long as the heroine is here and her parents are not allowed to quarrel, it will not succeed. The idea is that Green Tea Mom might be beaten by two dogs because she exposed her admiration for Jiang Dad. The heroine has a patriarchal grandma, which will also not end well. Her mother does not really like time-traveling girls, so the end will not be good. Ended

Oh, so the Xiao Lin who saves Jiang Zhiying now is the Xiao Lin who has memories? It was only later that I had the memory. If Xiao Lin, who has the memory now, mocks some chubby girl, there seems to be no problem. Maybe he knows that the heroine is this chubby girl.

I think Jiang Zhiying's nemesis may not really want to go against her. He has always been against her. He just hopes to attract her attention. The real purpose is to attract Jiang Zhiying's attention. In fact, the nemesis likes Jiang Zhiying, right?

The writing was very good at the beginning, but then what happened? The scenes between the heroine and the hero became less and less. They all revolved around the heroine's father Jiang Shixun, his brothers, sisters, and friends. First, the younger brother had an accident and was taken back to his home. Then the eldest sister had an accident and was taken home by her husband. Then the younger sister had an accident and was taken back home. My friend's son was abducted, I helped him, his son was kidnapped again, I helped him, then my friend's wife got into trouble and got divorced, then my friend's grandparents got into trouble, I helped him, and finally my friend's grandpa got into trouble, and I helped him again, isn't it that your plot line can't be extended without his family and which friend? No way to develop? Finally, the heroine's father, his daughter has space, and it's okay for his wife to know. After all, they are the heroine's parents. But the heroine's father said not to tell anyone else, then turned around and told his sisters, and later his father. How many people are there? Are you so careless about space?

How should I put it, the plot of this book is very good, but some details the author did not do well. Let me summarize it Advantages: 1. The theme is novel 2. The plot is compact 3. The character is likeable Insufficient 1. The writing style is young and astringent 2. The logic is somewhat imperfect, but it's not a big problem I hope you will continue to work hard ^0＾~, I think my comments are quite pertinent. If you really improve in the future, I will give a lot of five stars!

It's worthless, tasteless and a pity to throw away, mainly because of the shortage of books. The development of the whole story is quite childish, a bit like playing house... And there are too many people who know about space. Can you pay attention to the key points when writing characters? Halfway through, I felt that the heroine's father is the protagonist, and most of the chapters revolve around the heroine's father. The writing is mediocre and the details are poor. Many of the details are described in very general terms. Some of the characters' behaviors are exaggerated and unrealistic! ! ! ! Untrue! It looks fake! There are too many language descriptions, and some words feel fake and look like a primary school student's composition... Some settings and plots are quite good, but the story develops too slowly.

After reading more than 900 chapters, the heroine is only five years old, and there is no emotional drama with the hero. The heroine in the previous life did not like the hero, but she fell in love with the hero in the remaining 400 to 500 chapters? Isn't that outrageous? And it feels like the male protagonist doesn't like the female protagonist either? At the beginning, I was a little wary of the heroine. I felt very wary of the heroine being too powerful and afraid that I would not be able to control the heroine. And why is the heroine so precious to the hero's gold bars? After helping the male protagonist's grandfather treat his illness, the male protagonist gave him all the gold bars. The female protagonist was still very surprised as if she had never seen the world before? The rejuvenation elixir, the crystal core, and the jewelry in the heroine's space that the heroine gave to the hero, which one is worthless, and which one can't be obtained even if you ask for it? Are your eyelids so shallow? ? ? ?

I really couldn't bear it, so I quickly quit this plot. . . .

If I keep writing like this, I'm going to give up. I feel so bored. Can I just hang around bad women? You have been setting up people all the time, how can such a young child not be afraid of adults being suspicious of his words? Are the adults' IQs written down too low?

It flies directly from the hero and heroine's childhood to high school and college life, and the plot in between is not written. The plot slowly starts to suck from here on out. The names are also a bit confusing. I won't say anything else, I just want to say that after watching the finale: it felt like a waste of time. Forget about omitting the previous plot, especially after Lin Wanyi came back to recognize her bride, the plot simply progressed at four times the speed. The last two or three chapters are even faster than light, inexplicable, and a complete mess.